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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 17:16, 6 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this (for the WikiCup). ceranthor 17:16, 6 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Ceranthor: I don't mean to rush you, but I'm hoping to get this read in time for an April Fool's Day DYK. It should be fine if the GAN passes within the next two weeks, but just in case I wanted to let you know. SounderBruce 02:44, 11 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@SounderBruce: Thanks for the heads up. Was planning to get to it today or tomorrow. :) ceranthor 13:06, 11 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

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Lead
  • "It travels 1.3-mile (2.1 km)" - grammar; seems like a {{cvt}} error; rm the |Adj=on
    • Fixed.
History
  • "The first electric streetcar to run along Westlake Avenue was built by the Seattle Electric Railway and Power Company in October 1890, taking five days" - five days to run from where to where, though?
    • Fixed. That would be one slow ride, though.
  • "and earning the city government's first streetcar franchise.[2] " - not sure "earning" works here
    • Changed to "company was awarded"
  • "Streetcar service in Seattle would resume in 1982 with the opening of the Waterfront Streetcar line along Alaskan Way, but it ceased operations in 2005.[4][6]" - the antecedent to "it" here is unclear; service or the streetcar line? Should clarify.
    • Changed to "line"
  • "After the Seattle Commons plan was rejected by voters in 1996, " - how so? In a referendum?
    • Added referendum and years
  • "bio-medical research " - a nitpick, but don't think this should be hyphenated
    • Removed.
  • "The streetcar line is officially named the South Lake Union Streetcar, but is also known by a popular moniker—the South Lake Union Trolley (abbreviated as "SLUT"), which is used on merchandise sold by local businesses.[35] " - nitpick perhaps, but think you should add "it" between "but" and "is" if you are going to keep the comma after "Streetcar" here
    • Done.
  • "The streetcar was criticized for its slow speeds due to the lack of dedicated lanes and the lack of transit signal priority, which was reduced after the start of construction on Mercer Street in 2009.[4][45] " - what was reduced? As a lay reader, I'm confused by this sentence
    • The signal priority was removed (giving no time advantage to streetcars). I tried to make it more clear by re-arranging the last part of the sentence.
  • "allowing trains to arrive every 10 minutes all day on weekdays.[56] " - what does "all day" refer to, exactly? 24 hours?
    • Changed to mention mid-day hours, where the frequency boost was most apparent.
  • "The First Hill line generally runs south from Capitol Hill station to Yesler Terrace on Broadway and west on South Jackson Street to the International District and Pioneer Square, leaving a gap in downtown between the two streetcar lines.[72][73]" - "gap in downtown?"
    • It's explained in the next paragraph. The two lines are separated by a dozen or so blocks in downtown.
Route
  • The title of this section seems smushed by the image above it on the left.
    • I think it looks fine, but I've reversed the order of the images.
Service and operations
  • "Ridership has declined since 2014, in part due to schedule unreliability and the introduction of increased bus service along the Westlake Avenue corridor in 2016.[59][108]" - any numbers of the details of decline?
    • Added a number from the table.

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Good work here. Mostly prose nitpicks above. ceranthor 16:08, 11 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Ceranthor: Thanks for the review. I've answered to all of your comments above. SounderBruce 17:43, 11 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@SounderBruce: Great. Going to pass this then. ceranthor 18:36, 11 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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