Talk:Shelley Matheson/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:39, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments quick ones, many of which I've said before....

Please see other similar reviews:
- En-dashes.
  - AFAIK, they are all correct now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Starting paras with surname rather than She.
  - Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Repetitive "she" in sentences (see Personal, five in a row...)
  - REduced. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- WP:LEAD, four paras is too much for a short article.
  - Reduced to two paragraphs. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Captions (incomplete sentences don't need a full stop).
  - This is already the case. The only stops are in the one on the guernsey, which is two complete sentences. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Gliders team mate Bridie Kean attended her graduation.[6]" trivial.
- Removed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
What's the point of abbreviated DAS if you don't use it?
- Removed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Women's Wheelchair basketball" or "Women's wheelchair basketball" (infobox).
- Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"against Germany women's national wheelchair basketball team" do you mean "against Germany"?
- It's awkward, but for some reason is the way that Wikipedia names thing. Deleted sentence. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:03, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 6 looks odd.
- Corrected. An artifact of HTML Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 16 "Services — University of" should be an en-dash, not an em-dash.
- Okay. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put it on hold for a few days, and I would also ask you to fix up the remaining GANs you've mass-nominated with these common problems. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:41, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:03, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Further

I don't understand "Chaplin competed with the Gliders at the 2012 Summer Paralympics. In the gold medal game against Germany at the 2012 Summer Paralympics".
- Deleted second sentence. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:50, 13 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Why link Oz at the 2012 Paralympics second time round?
- Removed duplicated links with the link tool
Stat table headings need en-dashes.
- Added ndashes
Ref col shouldn't be sortable.
- Made table non-sortable
FTM-A col doesn't sort correctly.
- Made table non-sortable
Nor does FGM-A.
- Made table non-sortable
Two seasons in that table appear to be grey, the other three not. Why?
- Made table non-sortable

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:58, 13 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:50, 13 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]