Talk:Shea Theodore/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:53, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The Province mentions that Theodore's mother works at a bank. I think it would benefit the article if this fact was mentioned Done

"option out of the Burnaby Winter Club." - opting Done
"He played Minor hockey" - the word highlighted in bold doesn't need to be capitalized Done
Also, wikilink the above term for non-Ice hockey readers Done
"he was measured at 5’10 and 142-pounds." - the convert templates would be helpful to the two figures indicated in bold Done
"By the time he graduated from Minor hockey" - same issue as the second point I have raised in this section Done
Wikilink 2011 Canada Winter Games since there is an article on the subject Done
How about wikilinking the terms point and goal to the relevant articles for those unfamiliar with ice hockey terminology? Done
"Theodore was ranked 17th amongst American skated" - skaters Done
Wikilink 2013–14 season to 2013–14 WHL season Done
Wikilink scout to Scout (sport) and training camp to its respective article Done
Wikilink Norfolk Admirals to Norfolk Admirals (AHL) on its first mention and junior hockey to Junior ice hockey Done
Wikilink the term captain to Captain (ice hockey) Done
"He joined the Ducks American Hockey League (AHL) affiliate," - just the acronyms AHL will suffice since the full name is mentioned in previous paragraph of the article Done

"In the 1–0 win which ended the Flames' home win streak," - repetition of the word "win" Done
"He would later recorded his first career NHL goal " - the text in bold can be changed to would later record or later recorded Done
"an amount he estimated suppressed 15." - 15 times. Done
"and was praised for his skating ability." - praised by whom? Done
"due to the contract dispute." - what contract dispute? Please elaborate further where possible since this is the first time the contract dispute is mentioned in the article Done
"was invited to drop the Ceremonial first puck" - no need to captalize the word highlighted in bold Done
"during the Golden Knights Hockey Fights Cancer game on November 22, 2019." - Langley Advance Times says the game happened on November 21 not November 22 Done

2012–13 season is overlinked Done
Wikilink Russians to Russia men's national junior ice hockey team Done
Wikilink the second mention of Team Canada to Canada men's national junior ice hockey team Done
"While undergoing preparations to compete," - to compete in the tournament, Done
"after he failing a drug test" - either after failing or he failed please Done
How about wikilinking hCG hormone to the appropriate article for those unfamiliar with it Done
I believe it would help to wikilink the term blueline to the relevant article Done

References 10, 25 and 34 are missing the authors of the respective articles Done

Does #34 have an author?

If referring to the former Last Word of Sports reference that was deleted than yes 12:33, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

Reference 17 should include .com in the work field to maintain consistency with other sources Done
Reference 20 is missing Associated Press as the agency Done
Reference 23 is missing the author and The Canadian Press as the agency Done
Reference 24 is missing the date it was accessed Done
Reference 26 should not be in all capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS Done
References 19 & 39 is missing The Canadian Press in the agency field Done
What makes Reference 34 reliable? Removed

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 07:39, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96, Thanks for the speedy review. I believe I have made all the necessary changes. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 10:51, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Now promoting to GA class. I have made one minor change to the article. MWright96 (talk) 12:33, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]