Talk:Seal of Zion, Illinois/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HAL333 (talk · contribs) 03:38, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I look forward to reviewing this and working with you The C of E. ~ HAL333 03:38, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lede

You could wikilink bandstand
Insert "it" after "ruled"

Original Seal

Scottish Christian evangelist John Alexander Dowie, of the Christian Catholic Church in Zion, founded the city in 1902. Dowie's relation to this church is vague. From what I understand, he founded that church - could you clarify it? Also, was there a link between the founding of the church and the founding of the city as well?
To make it a little less choppy, you could combine the sentences The seal used a quartered shield with Christian symbols on it. The shield contained a cross, a dove holding an olive branch, a crown with a scepter with the city name in the shield with the phrase "God reigns" in a banner above it. into something like The seal used a quartered shield which displayed Christian symbols: a cross, a dove holding an olive branch, and a crown with a scepter with the city name in the shield with the phrase "God reigns" in a banner above it.
That last sentence/clause also uses "with" too often.

Lawsuit

You could change Sherman felt offended by this to The Christian symbolism offended Sherman, who demanded... It's a little more concise and less vague. The court also found that the "God reigns" banner was also a religious statement that had no secular context. Remove that second also.

New seal

By 1994, the police incorporated the new city seal into their decals. Add "had" before incorporated.

- @HAL333: I have made the amendements you have suggested. As for the court finding line, I think that should be retained because it shows that the court considered each of the elements of the seal rather than just looking at it as a whole. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 06:16, 20 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Pass Everything looks good now. ~ HAL333 18:04, 20 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]