Talk:Saving Private Ryan (soundtrack)/GA1
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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 11:41, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
Happy to offer a review. I've seen the film, but I've never listened to the album. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:41, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Recorded in Symphony Hall, Boston, Massachusetts, the scores feature the Tanglewood Festival Chorus on two tracks" Would it not be more interesting to give details of the orchestra that appears on all tracks, rather than a choir that appears on two?
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- What is the "closed musical number technique"? Is this a bit technical for the lead?
- "However, it only managed" Rhetoric
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- "leading Williams' pieces were played over scenes without any fighting" Clumsy
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- "By playing the Williams' scores over the breaks between the fighting sequences, it offers a moment of reflection for what happened" Again- this really needs to be reworked
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Williams made use of chose to make use of the closed musical number technique rather than use leitmotif" !!
- "The score makes use of string instruments to provide a warm sound for some portions of the scores, while using brass instruments for more "solemn" parts of the soundtrack.[4] In addition, Williams used horn instruments to provide a pensive tone to the pieces.[4]" This kind of analysis is valuable, but the way it's currently phrased is problematic.
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 01:57, 10 March 2016 (UTC)
- Can you really use "scores" in place of "tracks" like that? Would "score" not refer to the music as a whole?
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- Why "classic ƒM" rather than simply Classic FM? Also, perhaps you could rephrase this to avoid attributing a point of view to the radio channel?
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- Please be aware of MOS:LQ
- "In addition to the film itself, Saving Private Ryan's soundtrack received several nominations" Clumsy
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- You're inconsistent on your italicisation between the article body and the references. You're also inconsistent between "AllMusic" and "Allmusic".
- Are Filmtracks and Tracksounds reliable?
- There's no information about the album's release anywhere in the article body.
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- What's the reference for the credits?
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 20:53, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- There's an interview here; where's that from? Surely some valuable material there if it can be properly sourced.
- Some Googling is suggesting that "Hymn for the Fallen" has been fairly widely played; I wonder if you have any sources discussing this?
- There are loads of other sources which should be incorporated. For example, it appeared in the Classic FM hall of fame, which was reported in The Independent and The Telegraph.
- A review:
Saving Private Ryan: Music From the Original Motion Picture Soundtrack (DreamWorks). In hindsound, music is the last thing one remembers from "Saving Private Ryan." It is absent from the action scenes that dominate the film, and when the John Williams score does appear, it almost serves as a kind of relief. This is Williams's 16th score for a Steven Spielberg film, and it may be his most subtle, from the somber grace of "Hymn to the Fallen" and "Revisiting Normandy" to the ominous overview of "Omaha Beach" and the personal paeans "Wade's Death" and "High School Teacher." Like the men it honors, the music is quietly heroic, full of survivalist determination and pragmatic melancholy. From Harrington, Richard (September 6, 1998). "Summertime, and the Movies Spawn CDs". The Washington Post. p. G04. [specifically the "Sunday Arts" section]
- Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 01:57, 10 March 2016 (UTC)
- Another:
Saving Private Ryan soundtrack (Dreamworks).
John Williams' reflective score for Steven Spielberg's shattering war movie is sensitive without sensationalizing the subject.
The Boston Symphony Orchestra handles the resonant instrumentation.From Cohen, Howard; Deluca, Dan; Cristiano, Nick (August 13, 1998). "CD Reviews". Calgary Herald. p. HL10.
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I'm afraid this article seems like a long way from GA status. As it was only recently nominated and is only short, I'm going to close this review at the present time. I encourage you to fix the problems I've listed (and have another search for further sources- I've no doubt that there are more) and then renominate. Josh Milburn (talk) 12:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)