Talk:Satellaview/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 11:06, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hopefully I'll be able to review this properly. I haven't taken on a console article GA review before. Hope to have comments or suchlike before the end of the week. --ProtoDrake (talk) 11:06, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you ProtoDrake. I will be looking forward to your comments. Namcokid 47 ^(Contribs) 18:08, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Alright Namcokid47, I've got some comments for you.

History

"Nintendo stressed to video game publications, that much of Satellaview's content, namely broadcasts by St.GIGA themselves, were aimed primarily for adults, with video games constituting only a small portion of airtime." - I don't think we need the comma after "publications".
Seta doesn't link to the company page. Correct to SETA Corporation.
Since SquareSoft is a redirect, either change it to Square or link via SquareSoft.
"Despite the company being in a slump due to the failure of the Virtual Boy and sales of Super Famicom games falling" - Perhaps rephrase to "Despite the company being in a slump due to falling Super Famicom game sales and the Virtual Boy's failure". Just a suggestion. The original just seems needlessly wordy.
"Satellaview was never released in North America, which some publications cite due to the expensive costs of satellite broadcasting, and due to a supposed lack of appeal to American consumers." - Feels like there's a missing word in here. Maybe rewrite to "...which some publications cited as being due..." or similar. As it stands, it seems to jump from one sentence structure to another without a transition.
"When the service had first launched, St.GIGA had a number of issues regarding broadcasting video game..." - Too many "had"s.

Technical specifications

MB? I know many will know that means megabit, but it should be clarified in its first instance.
- In general, there are a lot of abbreviations here that might confuse a casual reader. I know it's unnecessary to link or explain all of them, but terms such as "BS" I think warrant at least an explanation of parenthesis.

Games and services

Link Chunsoft (or link to Spike Chunsoft, whichever is better).
Perhaps link Shirin the Wanderer to the Mystery Dungeon series article.

Reception and legacy

What is meant by "dismissed" in this instance? Dismissed as in sent away, dismissed as in shut down (not the case given info), dismissed in some other sense? It looks a strange word to use. If it's in the cited article, using quotes around it would work.
In the legacy section, there is a [when?] tag in place for how long the Satellaview has had a cult following. Please clarify this, or rephrase it.

That's what really jumped out at me. In general, an interesting and well-crafted article. Just some elements that look they were were missed during editing passes. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:17, 7 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

ProtoDrake - I believe I corrected everything you brought up. This was one of the longest articles I've done, so there were bound to be some oversights. Namcokid 47 ^(Contribs) 19:43, 7 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Namcokid47: If you want to take it further, I think it needs a peer review or similar. Otherwise, I think this is a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:54, 7 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]