Talk:Sammis Reyes/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"professional American football tight end for the " could we say "professional American footballer who plays tight end for the "? To avoid squishing those blue links together?
- I agree it's awkward, but so is calling him an "American footballer". Maybe that sounds more natural in British English? I originally just had football as a piped link as calling him a tight end right after should have avoided any confusion about which type of football he plays. If you still think that's an issue then I'll just use this suggestion.
"Reyes would play" -> "Reyes played"
Any stats we can put in the lead about his time in the NFL or too early?
- Too early, the NFL regular season has yet to start (that's next week) and he is very likely to be used sparingly this year due to his inexperience. His notability so far is simply how he made the roster of a professional American football team after having no prior experience or even knowledge in it about a year ago.
"19 and under" aged 19, or 19 years and under.
"Chilean national team" the Chile men's national basketball team??
- I did that to avoid using "basketball" three times in one sentence. However, I adjusted the sentence again and now it should be clear what national team he played for.
"Reyes would eventually move " Reyes eventually moved...
"Creek, Florida after" comma after Fl.
Is there a link for preseason?
- There is, but "preseason" is an NFL thing and not really done in college basketball. I changed it to simply "practicing", as that's what preseason basically is anyway.
"spent ... spent" repetitive.
"Reyes chose to end his " ended.
Make the File:Sammis Reyes training camp 2021 (cropped).jpg upright to hopefully make it avoid squashing the references into three columns.

Not much to complain about here, a neat and tidy article. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:01, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All suggestions accounted for, thanks for that. Seeing somebody else review my writing has made it clear that I use passive voice without really realizing it. ~ Dissident93 ^(talk) 17:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]