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A strange map

The map entitled "A view on 6th to 8th century AD ethnic distribution in the territory of present-day Romania and neighbouring areas" sharply contradicts to all the reliable sources cited in the article. Here is a list of my questions (I do not cite sources, because the article is well-referenced):

There are different views, what's wrong with that? TheDacian (talk) 13:38, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
There is nothing wrong about different views. However, a school map from the 1970s which contradicts to all the modern academic sources cited in this article cannot be used here. For instance, the absence of the Bulgarians from the map is not a different view, but it proves that the map is not based on reliable source. Borsoka (talk) 13:56, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
There is not only the school map. You are not the censor of maps here. TheDacian (talk) 14:22, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
Please look at the sources of the map. It is a school map from the 1970s. For instance, one of the sources you added [1] does not present Slavs in Transylvania and it covers only the 6th-7th centuries. Borsoka (talk) 14:26, 21 January 2013 (UTC)

I guess this map is no stranger than this one [2]. I suggest waiting to see what will happed to know if this kind of maps are acceptable or not. Also I am surprised by Borsoka`s comments here when on an almost identical situation he has completely different opinion. Adrian (talk) 21:35, 22 January 2013 (UTC)

Sorry, I do not understand your above comment. There is no reliable source supporting this map. I do not remember a situation when I stated that a map which is not suported by reliable sources is acceptable. Borsoka (talk) 02:34, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
You rejected the map "A view on 6th to 8th century AD ethnic distribution in the territory of present-day Romania and neighbouring areas" that is backed by reliable sources, based on personal analysis and comparisons with other views TheDacian (talk) 06:33, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
No, I rejected the map, because it contradicts to all the reliable sources cited in the article. Please comment my above remarks which are based on reliable sources. Borsoka (talk) 07:30, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
I am not preoccupied of your original research. This is a sourced map and it has to stay. Period. TheDacian (talk) 07:37, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
Thank for correcting the timeframe of the map. I see that you can be convinced that you are wrong, even if you deny it for some misty reason. Have a nice day. Borsoka (talk) 07:45, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
The sources existed there and I did not check them too much before; I did not expect PANONNIAN not to respect them. Have a nice day too TheDacian (talk) 07:50, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
Sorry, I was wrong. I think a question still remained unanswered: where are the Bulgarians?. It is strange that a people whose presence in the territory is well documented are not presented in a map. Borsoka (talk) 08:07, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
Bulgarians are South Slavs TheDacian (talk) 08:15, 23 January 2013 (UTC)

I see that the updated map is ok now, by wiki standards. I don`t understand this [3] - Where are the Bulgarians? What does that matter? We have an academic source and that`s all that it matters. Don`t want to "add salt", but on an almost identical situation where I shared your POV , Where are the Vlachs? It doesn`t matter, the source states this info. Adrian (talk) 08:24, 23 January 2013 (UTC)

Dear Adrian, the map cannot be OK, since it contradicts not only to all relvenat reliable sources cited in the article, but also to its own single source. Consequently, the map is OR that cannot be presented in this article. Sorry, but I do not remember any identical situation. Did I ever supported a map which was not based on reliable sources? Borsoka (talk) 04:26, 24 January 2013 (UTC)
  • How could have the Romanian language survived if Slavs had been everywhere? If this map was true the official language of Romania would be a Slavic language nowadays. What was the map based on? Archaeology? Hydronymy? Fakirbakir (talk) 10:18, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
It is not our job to make this kind of research. According to your latest maps there were even less Vlachs/Romanians in Transylvania TheDacian (talk) 10:28, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
I don`t care on what is it based exactly, it is based on an academic source that`s all that is of interest for wikipedia.Adrian (talk) 12:38, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
Dear all, sorry, but I have not received an answer to my question. Where are the Bulgarians? If you read the reliable sources cited in the article (Fine 1991, Barford 2001, Curta 2006, etc) state that the Slavic population and the Turkic (=Bulgarian) population of the first Bulgarian Empire formed two distinct groups up until the end of the 9th century. So, I would like to know where are the Bulgarians. Moreover, the [book which is claimed to be the source of the map http://books.google.hu/books?id=ORSMBFwjAKcC&pg=PA3&lpg=PA5&vq=maps&output=html&redir_esc=y] does not refer to Slavs in Transylvania. Borsoka (talk) 21:02, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
So the map File:Europe around 800.gif is more accurate according to you. Where are the Vlachs / (proto) Romanians here? TheDacian (talk) 21:39, 23 January 2013 (UTC)
Yes, the presence of Vlachs in this period is a debated issue. However, there are a number of reliable sources (including the map you referred to above [4]) stating that there were Vlachs in Transylvania. Therefore, that the Vlachs are presented in the map cannot be treated as OR (it represents a widespread POV). On the other hand, there is no reliable source denying the presence of Bulgarians in the Lower Danube region or stating that they were not a distinct population. Borsoka (talk) 03:34, 24 January 2013 (UTC)
Is it debated the presence of Vlachs in Europe? I can't see them anywhere on the whole map, not only in Transylvania! The most numerous people in the Balkan area is invisible or insignifiant. The folllowing statament by the French historian Ferdinand Lot is characterizing for this map: Still, where should we place the Daco-Romanians? The Hungarians, the Serbs, the Bulgarians and the Greeks all agree that by no means are they natives of Transylvania, Serbia, Bulgaria, Macedonia or the Pindus. However, they could not have turned up out of the blue or from the bottom of hell. This unanimous attitude against the Romanians is therefore an incentive to adopt the thesis of the Daco-Roman continuity north of the Danube [5] TheDacian (talk) 06:57, 24 January 2013 (UTC)
Yes, as I mentioned the presence of Vlachs in Transylvania in the period is a widespread POV presented in reliable sources. However, (1) the map contradicts to all reliable sources cited in the article covering the period (where are the Bulgarians?, etc) (2) the map contradicts to its alleged source as it is presented in the following table:
Region The map in the article The map's alleged source [6]
Transylvania Vlachs and Slavs Vlachs
Banat Avars and Slavs Avars
Upper Tisa plains Slavs not specified
Wallachia Slavs Wallachian Slavs
Serbia Slavs not specified
Northern Bulgaria Slavs Severians (a Slavic tribe)
Since there are four regions (Transylvania, Banat, Upper Tisa plains, Serbia) where this map and its alleged source contradict to each other, we can only state that the map is not based on reliable sources. Borsoka (talk) 15:52, 24 January 2013 (UTC)
Have you read in the legend what the grey colour represents? TheDacian (talk) 20:22, 24 January 2013 (UTC)
I am not surprised. It is a typical "Slavic supremacy" map and of course does not follow its own source. Fakirbakir (talk) 21:41, 24 January 2013 (UTC)
Where are the Slavs in Transylvania in the cited map? And where are the Bulgarians in the map? Borsoka (talk) 03:40, 25 January 2013 (UTC)

Ok, wait a bit. Borsoka thinks this map is OR? Can you present your case why do you think this? I see that this map has a source but it is not available online, so until proven otherwise this offline source is as good as any other source. Borsoka why do you claim that it is not supported by this source? And why the analysis where which ethnic group was? I think that is the job of the academic researcher not us wikipedians to analyse. We are here just to put whatever is stated in the source, nothing more. If we wikipedians do more, I believe that is called WP:OR. Adrian (talk) 19:08, 25 January 2013 (UTC)

And why is this source[7] excluded from the map now? Adrian (talk) 19:10, 25 January 2013 (UTC)

OK. I still do not see the "Vlachs and Slavs" in Transylvania in the source you two have been adding to the map, but I understand that it is an important map for both of you. Borsoka (talk) 02:59, 26 January 2013 (UTC)
If that is the problem, you should say so. This snide remarks are not helpful because the same could be said for you at the Hungarian map. I will remove this map and will reinsert it only when it is corrected to reflect the source 100%. We just need a minor correction. Adrian (talk) 11:49, 26 January 2013 (UTC)
You are right, now I understand. The map will be corrected. Sorry for the misunderstading. 79.117.168.21 (talk) 07:22, 26 January 2013 (UTC)
Dear all, I have been writing of the same issue for days. I think it is also strange that the Bulgarians (who formed an empire along the Lower Danube) are not mentioned in the map: there is no reliable source denying their presence). Dear Adrian, I do not understand your reference to "the Hungarian map". Where is it and what is the "same" issue with it? Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 27 January 2013 (UTC)
Dear Borsoka, as I have been saying for days, we leave that kind of questions to the published academics and not to us. Simply it is not our job to analyze the reference, it is just to state the reference and the data it is presenting. There is a reliable source for this map, and if they are not presented there is your answer. It is not a mainstream map, but it is a map with valid sources. Unfortunately I am busy in the next few days but when I can, I will correct this map to reflect the source 100% and as such reinsert it. Adrian (talk) 08:46, 28 January 2013 (UTC)

I have corrected the map to reflect it`s sources. Adrian (talk) 10:17, 28 January 2013 (UTC)

What is a better link?

Dear Nergaal, I would like to understand your message. What article do you think fits better to the period following the early middle ages, than the article describing the middle ages? Borsoka (talk) 20:27, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Quadell (talk · contribs) 19:19, 12 August 2013 (UTC)
Nominator: Borsoka (talk)

"Romania in the Early Middle Ages" is a very broad topic, and accordingly there is a lot of information in this article. I know relatively little about the history of Romania, which gives me the opportunity to analyze how well the article introduces a novice to the subject. It's a privilege to work with such a knowledgeable scholar on the topic.

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1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Excellent prose, clear and well-organized.
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. This follows the MoS and fulfills all GA requirements.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. The citations are great.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Everything is sourced, and the sources seem reliable.
2c. it contains no original research. There is no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Anyone can read this and learn about every aspect of Romania in the Early Middle Ages.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). Every part is on-topic.
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. There are no POV concerns.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. The article is stable.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. All images are free and appropriate.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Relevance has been established, and captions are great.
7. Overall assessment. Outstanding.
Note: For the recommendations for improvement below, I will refer to the Good Article Criteria by number and letter. When the issue is fully resolved, I will strike through the criteria number and letter. When an entire section is complete, I will move it into the collapsable "resolved issues" section below.
Resolved issues
Background
  • 1b A "background" section is often used to gently introduce the reader to the background of the subject of the article, so that the subsequent information makes sense. I like the material in the "background" section, but I think it could do with a new paragraph in the front that briefly explains the world at that time. "The Roman Empire was the most powerful empire Europe had ever seen", stuff like that. Say in a sentence what role provinces played in the empire, and how as Roman power declined the provinces had to defend themselves against invaders, or whatever information would be useful to introduce readers to the world that Romania came from.
  • 1b It would make more sense to me if the organization of the "Background" and "Early history of the Romanians" sections were improved in the following way: There should be one "Background" supersection with two subsections. The first subsection would be called "Romanian territory within Rome", and would say "Main article: Roman Dacia". It would include the introductory paragraph mentioned above, and all the information currently in the present background section. The second subsection would be called "Linguistic origin of Romania", and would say "Main article: History of Romanian and Origin of the Romanians." It would include all the information currently in the present "Early history of the Romanians" section. I think the novice reader would better understand the beginning sections of the article if they were presented in this way.
    • Thanks. A "Background" supersection was created with two subsections: (1) Roman provinces and native tribes (2) Origin of the Romanians. The "Roman provinces and native tribes" title is better, because (a) there were more than one provinces in the territory of modern Romania (Roman Dacia and Lower Moesia) which were separated from each other with a wide region inhabited by free native tribes (such as the Carpians, Sarmatians, Bastarnae). Borsoka (talk) 06:12, 15 August 2013 (UTC)
Roman provinces and native tribes
  • 1b Hatnotes: The "Roman provinces and native tribes" section lists Lower Moesia as one of the main article hatnotes... but first off, there is no "Lower Moesia" article; it's just a redirect to Moesia. And secondly, this section barely mentions Moesia. Roman Dacia is a better main-article-hatnote, but it only covers a part of what the section is about. I would prefer if the text could mention Roman Dacia and wikilink it, without having any "main article" hatnotes. Also, the see-also-hatnotes are not needed, since they are mentioned in the text of the section (though Goths should be wikilinked there).
    • Thanks. Moesia in place of Lower Moesia added (because there were two Roman provinces in the territories now forming Romania.) "See also"-s deleted. Borsoka (talk) 15:20, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
  • 1a "Barbaricum" should be defined or explained.
  • 1a "a projecting salient north of the Danube" is not easily understood in modern English. I would reword this, and not use a direct quote.
  • 1a "Moldavia" is first mentioned in the "Gutthiuda" section, unlinked and unexplained, and the article never links to the Moldavia article. "Transylvania" is not linked in the article body (and should be, in the "Roman provinces and native tribes" section). There needs to be some way of introducing the reader to the idea that Transylvania, Wallachia, Moldova, and others, are regions that would later become Romania. This section seems like a good place for that. Could you put this information into this section? I'm not sure the best way to include that, because I know so little about it, but it seems like there should be a way to clearly present this. Perhaps the sentence "It included Oltenia and large portions of Banat, Transylvania, and Wallachia" could be concluded with "all regions that would later be included in Romania". I can't tell Moldova's status from this section; was it ever a part of Dacia? Perhaps a sentence could be added to say "Moldova, another region later included in Romania, was never conquored by Rome" (if that's true). By putting this information here, even a reader who knows very little about Romania will understand from the beginning of the article how the regions are related, which is important for understanding the article.
    • Thanks. Wikilinks added in "Roman provinces and native tribes" section where their status (never occupied by the Romans) is also mentioned. A map of the historical regions of Romania added at the lead. Please note Moldavia and Moldova do not refer to the same territory: Moldavia is a historical region within Romania which once was a principality also encompassing Moldova which is now an independent republic bordering Romania. (I am sure that this explanation clarified everything :) :) :) ) Borsoka (talk) 09:11, 19 August 2013 (UTC)
Origin of the Romanians
  • 2a Most statements are cited using footnotes, and this is appropriate. For some direct quotes (such as "mixed with the Huns" or "of the Christians in the land of the Goths"), you similarly use footnotes to cite the source of the quote (Zosimus and Philostorgius, respectively). But for a few other direct quotes, you use a parenthetical inline citation method mixed with footnote citations. In this section, you follow the direct quote "evolution of Vulgar Latin into Proto-Romanian" with "(Vlad Georgescu)", and then use a footnote citation to further describe the source. The guideline Wikipedia:Citing sources says "citations within any given article should follow a consistent style", and lists "switching between parenthetical and <ref> tags" in its list of things to be avoided. If it is necessary to give the source of a quote in the text, you should do so via a textual rewording, instead of using a parenthetical citation style. So in this instance, the sentence could be reworded like so: "The 'evolution of Vulgar Latin into Proto-Romanian', as the scholar Vlad Georgescu termed it,[cite] is...". You may be able to word this better, and you might feel that it is not necessary to name Georgescu in the text. But either way, it's important to avoid mixing parenthetical and footnote citation styles. (This is also an issue in the "North of the limes" section, below.)
Scythia Minor and the limes...
  • 1b Hatnotes: Scythia Minor is listed as the main article. But the Scythia Minor article is actually shorter than the section, so it isn't really a place for the reader to find more thorough information on the topic of the section. Instead, the "Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube" should wikilink Scythia Minor on first mention, but should not refer to it as the main article.
  • 6b The caption "Scythia Minor" should be improved. I'm honestly not sure that the map is useful in this article, since most colonies in the map are not mentioned and the map does not provide context for Scythia Minor's location in Europe.
  • 4 The prose in this section is very good. But the wording at the end could be more neutral. Right now it displays the common classical bias of siding with Rome over outsiders. Instead of "the fortress fell to the enemy", you should reword this. Perhaps "The Avars overtook the fortress" would be appropriate?
North of the limes
  • 1b Hatnotes: Carpians and Sarmatians should be wikilinked and briefly defined in the text of the "North of the limes" section, but those articles are not really "main articles" for the section.
  • 1a It would be clearer if you started this section with "The former Roman provinces of Transylvania and northern Banat", to introduce the regions. (They were former provinces, yes?)
    • Thanks. New wording (Transylvania and Banat were not Roman provinces. They are regions which used to be part of the Roman province of Dacia Traiana).Borsoka (talk) 08:31, 15 August 2013 (UTC)
  • 1a I don't understand the "but" in the last sentence. Wouldn't being admitted into the empire make it more likely that they would survive?
  • 2a As I mentioned above, you shouldn't mix parenthetical and footnote citation styles. Here, you follow "shadowy and poorly understood" with "(I. P. Haynes, W. S. Hanson)", and then use a footnote citation to further describe the Haynes and Hanson source. The sentence could be reworded like this:
    The existence of local Christian communities can be assumed in Porolissum, Potaissa and other settlements, due to evidence such as pottery with "Chi-rho" signs and other Christian symbols.[cite] However the scholars I. P. Haynes and W. S. Hanson judge this evidence to be "shadowy and poorly understood".[cite]
You can probably reword it better yourself, if you prefer, and you may decide that it is not necessary to name the scholars in the text; I trust your judgment there.
Gutthiuda
  • 1b Hatnotes: I don't think Thervingi is properly speaking a main article. It's linked in the text, which is enough. Listing Sântana de Mureş-Chernyakhov culture as "see also" is inappropriate for two reasons: first, it's a redirect to Chernyakhov culture, and second, it's linked in the text instead. It's fine to list Gothic Christianity as a "see also", but I would prefer if it were linked in the text instead. (Perhaps following "Christian prisoners of war were the first missionaries among the Goths" with "and ushered in the developing tradition of Gothic Christianity". But use whatever wording is most appropriate.)
    • Thanks. Actually, I think Thervingi is the proper "main article", because Gutthiuda was the land of the western Goths, that is Thervingi. Likewise, reference to the "Sântana de Mureş-Chernyakhov culture" is important, because (1) that was the archaeological culture which specified Gutthiuda (therefore the article describing its main features, also characterizes the territory of modern Romania in the same period). (2) "Chernyakov culture" is traditionally referred as "Sântana de Mureş" or "Sântana de Mureş-Chernyakov culture" in connection with the history of Romania (Sântana de Mureş/Marosszentanna is a village in Romania). Borsoka (talk) 10:35, 19 August 2013 (UTC)
Gepidia
  • 1a The prose in this section is generally very good, but there are a few places where an added explanation would help the reader. If this section started with "The Gepids were an East Germanic tribe closely related to the Goths", it would properly introduce the subject. And the first mention of Ardaric would be more clear if it were slightly expanded to say "...but the latter remained united under the rule of the Gepid king Ardaric".
  • 1b Hatnotes: Gepids is a fine main-article hatnote here. The see-also Apahida necropolis is not needed, since it's linked in the text (as "sumptuous tombs"). The see-also Gepidia is problematic, since it's a redirect to Kingdom of the Gepids, and really it should be linked in the text instead of listed as a see-also. (Personally, I think the Kingdom of the Gepids article should be merged into the Gepids article anyway -- but that's not relevant to this article.) Similarly, it would be better if the Battle of Nedao were mentioned and wikilinked in the text, instead of listed as a see-also. Both of these could be handled, if you choose, by rewriting the last sentence of the 2nd paragraph as follows:
    The Gepids regained their independence in the Battle of Nedao and "ruled as victors over the extent of all Dacia", forming the Kingdom of the Gepids that same year.
Hunnic Empire
  • 1b Hatnotes: Hunnic Empire is a fine main-article hatnote here. Battle of Nedao is not needed as a see-also, since it's wikilinked in the text. "Attila the Hun" isn't needed either, though Attila should be wikilinked and introduced in the text. (Perhaps "...an Eastern Roman envoy sent to Attila, the Huns' most famous ruler, in 448" or something similar.)
Dark Ages
  • 4 There is a "Dark Ages" supersection, but the phrase "Dark Ages" is problematic. Looking at the disambiguation page for Dark Ages, I'm not sure what you mean by the term. If you mean the Early Middle Ages, the whole article is about that period. So consider revising the name for this supersection, and perhaps you might find it best to revise the division into "Late Roman Age", "Dark Ages", and "Last waves..."
    • Thanks. I would prefer this expression. I refer to Britannica [8], the which states that the expression is "sometimes taken to derive its meaning from the fact that little was then known about the period", and this is the case: there is little information on these centuries. Borsoka (talk) 09:26, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
      • Ah, I see. I'm familiar with the Greek Dark Ages, which are probably comparable. Would "Romanian Dark Ages" be a better section title, to distinguish it from the European "Dark Ages"? – Quadell (talk) 13:08, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
        • The use of "Romanian Dark Ages" could not be substantiated by reliable sources. I still suggest that this title should be preserved: it is clear, and can be substantiated by reliable sources cited in the article. Borsoka (talk) 13:04, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
Between Huns and Avars
  • 1b Hatnotes: The main-article-hatnotes are fine, although "Sclavenes" should be Sclaveni (the actual article name). I don't know enough about the Early Slavs or Korchak culture to say for sure, but these see-also-hatnotes seem like they are appropriate.
    • Thanks. "Sclaveni" added instead of "Sclavenes". "Antes" and "Sclavenes" are regarded by most scholars (I refer to the works by Barford, Fine, Heather cited in the article) as Early Slavs, but this view is criticised by Curta (his works are also referred to). In order to provide a NPOV I preferred to use the neutral "Antes" and "Sclaveni/Sclavenes" terms (used by all these reliable sources in accordance with the primary sources). Moreover, also in order to be neutral, the section refers to the fact that between c. 450 and 550 diverse local cultures existed in the region. The reference to the "Korchak culture" (whose existence is sharply criticised by Curta and Teodor 2005) is deleted. Borsoka (talk) 09:26, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
  • 1a "Between" can refer to temporal relations or spacial relations. It seems to me that the "Between the Huns and Avars" section uses "between" in a temporal sense, describing the people of the Romanian region after the Huns had retreated but before the Avars came to dominate in western Romania. Is that correct? It's confusing because the Huns were at their peak in 450, but the "Between the Huns and Avars" section runs from c. 420 to c. 600. Or is the word "between" here meant spatially, referring to the region between the Hunnic Empire and the region controlled by the Avars? The section seems to be mostly about archaeological evidence regarding Sclavenes and Antes. Would "Antes and Sclavenes" be a better name for the section?
    • Thanks. The date is corrected (it was a mistake). Text referring to Sclavenes from the "Avar period" transferred to the proper subsection. I would not change the subtitle's name, because it is neutral without suggesting any ethnic context. Borsoka (talk) 09:26, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
  • 1a Related to the above issue, it seems like this section could use an introductory sentence. Something like "After the defeat of the Huns, the Romanian region settled into a long period of decline" or "After the defeat of the Huns, the Romanian region underwent a dramatic cultural shift" or whatever is most accurate. Some sort of sentence would certainly be useful to introduce the various evidences given in this section.
  • 1a "This story supports ancient authors' claims that Sclavenes and Antes lived 'under a democracy'". There are two issues here. First, I don't understand how proposing a Latin-speaking military commander supports the idea that they lived under a democracy. Second, calling it a "story" suggests that it might not be true. If historians believe it is likely to have happened, don't call it a story. (If historians think the event is apocryphal, the previous sentence should be clarified to say so.)
  • 1a In this section, I suspect "the Romans" refers to the Byzantines. I know the primary sources called them "Romans", but it would be less confusing to refer explicitly to the Byzantine Empire instead of the Roman Empire.
Avar Empire
  • 1a I don't understand the last sentence. Do you mean this? The last remnants of the Avar Empire were resettled in Pannonia by Charlemagne
Between Avars and Hungarians
  • 1b Hatnotes: Gelou, Gesta Hungarorum, Glad (duke), and Menumorut should not be see-also-hatnotes, but should be linked in the text. History of the Székely people is a very appropriate see-also.
    • Thanks. I am sure that the deletion of the "Romanian" Gelou, Glad and Menumorut would create a lasting edit war, especially if the reference to the history of the (Hungarian-speaking) Székely people would be left as the only article to be "see also". This is a sensitive issue in this part of the universe. Borsoka (talk) 16:16, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
      • Ah, I'm not very familiar with the political implications of emphasizing one group over another, and I understand it can be tricky. I know that it is usually discouraged to have "see also" hatnotes for articles that are linked in the text, and that we should strive to avoid that whenever possible. Currently there are four see-also hatnotes that are also linked in the text. Is there a way to reduce that without seeming biased? Would it be better to remove all see-also hatnotes in this section? I'm really not sure what the best balance is, but I suspect the current situation (with four duplicated see-alsos) is not it. – Quadell (talk) 19:39, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Question: Are "Dridu" settlements and huts here related to the Dridu commune? Is it worth linking, or would that just confuse the reader? I really don't understand how the word "Dridu" is used here at all.
  • 1a Similar to the question above regarding "Between the Huns and Avars", I have trouble understanding what the "Between Avars and Hungarians" section is primarily about. Is "between" meant temporaly, referring to the time period between Avar domination and the Hungarian conquest? Or does it mean the region between those areas? It's confusing because the Avar Empire was estimated to last from around 560 to 800, but the "between" section is designated 600-900, so the time periods mostly overlap. But the physical regions seem to overlap as well, with Aras dominating in the far west, and Hungarians presumably coming from the west as well... and the section is more about the far east of Hungary.
  • 1a "Hungarian conquest of the territory" should link to Hungarian conquest of the Carpathian Basin, since it has not previously been mentioned. The text then says "but did not mention the conquerors' opponents known from contemporary sources." So... who were the conquerors' opponents? This section also mentions Vlachs for the first time in the article, and should link to Vlachs and explain the term.
First Bulgarian Empire before conversion
  • 1a It seems to me that this section would be more natural after "Avar Empire" and before "Between Avars and Hungarians". It's a self-contained unit, referring to the Bulgars and Byzantines. The "Avar Empire" section ends with the Bulgar attacks, so it would be natural to immediately explain the Bulgars after that. And the "Between Avars and Hungarians" section ends with discussions of "the Hungarian conquest of the territory", which the image caption also mentions, so it would be natural for "Hungarians before conversion" to immediately follow it. What do you think?
Hungarians before conversion
First Bulgarian Empire after conversion
  • 1a It isn't immediately clear to the reader if the events of this section involve just a neighbor of Romania, or involves an empire that ruled a small part of what is now Romania, or involves an area that includes nearly all of modern Romania. Any little bits of orienting information you could add would be helpful. (For instance, when you say "Byzantine troops occupied large portions of Bulgaria", or when you say "the Byzantines conquered the whole territory of the Bulgarian Empire", these would be natural places to mention whether current Romanian territory is included.)
Patzinakia
  • 6b It would be better if the caption for the "runestone G134" explicitly said how it related to Pechenegs. For instance, it could say "The 11th-century runestone G134 from Gotland may describe Vlachs travelling with Pechenegs." (Or whatever's most accurate.) This is necessary because the caption uses very different language to identify the stone than the article does.
    • Thanks. I opted deleting the picture, because it is difficult to describe. (Blakumen are mentioned in the runestone who might have been Vlachs who possibly lived in present-day Romania (which was the land of the Pechenegs around 1050). I added "Blakumen" as "main". Borsoka (talk) 16:16, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
Byzantine revival
Cumania
Mongol invasion
Throughout the article
  • 1b In order to avoid articles expanding forever and becoming unmanageably long, we use hatnotes in sections to say where more information can be found. "Main article" hatnotes direct the reader to an article which fully describes the content of the section in a more detailed way. "See also" hatnotes give related articles which obliquely refer to the content of the section, but which are not themselves wikilinked in the text of the section. Sometimes this article uses hatnotes correctly, but there are hatnote problems throughout. I have tried to list all hatnote problems in the sections above, but you should go through all the "See also" and "main article" designations and make sure they are truly appropriate, adding appropriate hatnotes when necessary. And in particular, I would say that Origin of the Romanians should not be disambiguated at the top of the article, since it is the main article of the "Origin of the Romanians" section of this article. Similarly, the "See also" section at the bottom of the article lists three articles, but I don't think a "See also" section is needed at all for this article. (Early Middle Ages is already linked in this article, and the other two aren't related enough to be included.) Read Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Layout#See also section to see Wikipedia's official guidelines on "See also" sections.
    • Thanks. "Origin of the Romanians" is not disambiguated any more. Borsoka (talk) 13:04, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
      • Great. Early Middle Ages should not be in the "see also" list at the bottom of the article. Consider removing the entire "See also" list at the bottom, though that's necessary for GA promotion.
  • 1a The article first explicitly mentions the Byzantine Empire in the "First Bulgarian Empire before conversion (c. 670–864)" section, and there it is not Wikilinked... the Eastern Roman Empire is mentioned back in the "Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube (c. 270–c. 700)" section, and is not Wikilinked. The article should clearly mention the Byzantine Empire, with a Wikilink, the first time it is important in the history of Romania, and it should be clear even to someone with little knowledge of European history just who the major players are in any given section.
    • Thanks. Wikilinks added. Borsoka (talk) 13:04, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
      • I notice that the article uses the term "Eastern Roman" 11 times, and also uses the term "Byzantine" 12 times. In my opinion, it would be an improvement to be as consistent as possible in how you refer to this empire. (This isn't necessary for GA status, but it's something to consider.) – Quadell (talk) 16:35, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
        • Thanks. I hope that the article is consequent (and is in line with reliable sources): the "Eastern Roman" term is only used for the years preceeding 610 and the "Byzantine" term is exclusively for the next period. Nevertheless, I added a text which may help to link the two terms: Constantine IV is now referred as "Eastern Roman (or Byzantine) Emperor" (this is the first occasion, the "Byzantine" term is used in the text). Borsoka (talk) 17:55, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
Lead
  • 1a The lead is very good. Almost everything in the lead is fully covered in the article body, and it effectively summarizes material found throughout the article. (It's a good lead; it just needs a little more.) But there is one fact in the lead which is not found in the body of the article: that Romanians were "also called Vlachs during this period". That fact should be mentioned in the body somewhere.
Kingdom of Hungary
  • 1b Hatnotes: This section does not list a main article, but I would have thought it would be Kingdom of Hungary (1000–1526). In addition, Székely Land is really the only valid see-also hatnote here. (Transylvanian Saxons should instead be linked where it is mentioned in the text, and the other articles are already linked in the text.)
  • 6b The article refers to "the Cistercian abbey at Cârţa", but the caption refers to "Ruins of the Cârţa Monastery". It would be clearer if both used the same descriptor (or if the caption was expanded to explain the significance).
  • 1a Up until now, the article has not mentioned "Romanians" as a people (outside the lead). It's mentioned the Romanian region, and the Romanian language... and of course it has gone into depth about various groups such as Bulgarians, Vlachs, Avars, etc. But in this section, the article suddenly starts referring to the "Romanians", contrasting them with Pechenegs, Székelys, and Saxons. It isn't clear at all who they were, or where they came from.
    • Thanks. The "Early history of the Romanians" section clarifies that the Romanians are descendants of the Romance speaking population of Southeastern Europe. The "Emergence of new powers" section also refers to their mention by a late source in connection with the Hungarian conquest of the Carpathian Basin. Otherwise, the origin of the Romanians is a highly debated and emotionally sensitive issue in this region. Accordingly, I assume, the best approach is if we follow the example set by Curta (Curta 2006): he only concentrates to the facts ("they are mentioned by this source and by that source....") without clearly taking sides in favor or against any theories on the Romanians' ethnogenesis, or without mentioning that the Romanians' ethnogenesis is subject to debate. Furthermore, there is a separate article on the Romanians' origin, I suggest we should not repeat it here. Borsoka (talk) 05:20, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
Aftermath
  • 1b The Aftermath section seems very short to me. It simply deals with the aftermath of the Mongol attacks. It says that the main article is Romania in the Middle Ages, so this section should include a paragraph or two explaining in broad strokes how the Romania described in this article grew into the Romania we see in that article.
    • Follow-up: Thinking about it further, it seems to me that all the text in "aftermath" would be more fitting in the "Mongol invasion" section. Then an "Aftermath" section would need to be written, of perhaps 2 paragraphs, describing briefly how the Romania of the Early Middle Ages fared in subsequent eras.
    • Thanks. I am working on this. I need some time for working on the issues raised above. I think on Saturday I can finish. I appreciate your hard work. Borsoka (talk) 03:57, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

I'm about half more than half done. I'll continue reviewing, but this is a long process. Please don't be discouraged by the number of issues I'm raising! I'm very impressed with this article, and I think by the time the GA process is done it will be in incredible shape. Thanks for continuing to work on it. – Quadell (talk) 19:45, 15 August 2013 (UTC)

Dear Quadell, working with you is a privilege for me. I will be thinking on the proper way of dealing with the issues you raised in the next couple of hours. For the time being the lead and the aftermath section are my greatest concerns. Actually, I will not be concentrating on these issues, but I will let my "grey cells" work own their own. I will go on editing tomorrow. Have a nice day!Borsoka (talk) 14:25, 16 August 2013 (UTC)
I am finally finished reviewing this article. If all these issues are addressed in a relatively quick amount of time, I'm sure this will achieve GA status. I'll keep watching this page to answer any questions, and to strike through any issues that are resolved. All the best, – Quadell (talk) 15:11, 20 August 2013 (UTC)

I am delighted to promote this article to GA status. Excellent work. – Quadell (talk) 13:06, 25 August 2013 (UTC)

Dear, Quadell, thank you for your assistance. I hope I will have chance to work with you again. Borsoka (talk) 13:27, 25 August 2013 (UTC)

Sarmatians

This phrase is dubious Sarmatians – who came from the lowlands east of the Carpathians – settled in Banat at the end of the 3rd century. It is known that the Sarmatians were already in the area as allies of the Dacians during the Trajan's Dacian Wars (101-106 AD), as the Trajan's Column depicts it and ancient sources mention. The Iazyges and Alans were in the area way before the 3rd century, as many sources describe. Something has to be corrected and clarified here.--Codrin.B (talk) 14:08, 25 August 2013 (UTC)

Dear Codrin, would your clarify your above concern. I do not clearly understand it. What is the area where the Sarmatians were present during Trajan's War? Borsoka (talk) 14:15, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
For example, in 7 BC, when the Dacian kingdom built up by Burebista began to collapse, the Romans took advantage and encouraged the Iazyges to settle in the Pannonian plain, between the Danube and the Tisa Rivers. Which means Sarmatians were near or in Banat at least since 1st century BC/1st century AD. And this is just one example of the presence of Sarmatians in the area. The statement saying that Sarmatians settled only in the 3rd century may lead the reader to believe that they were not there before, which is misleading I think. Certanly Sarmatians were shuffled around many times by the Romans and being nomads, it is hard to say where they were at certain times.--Codrin.B (talk) 16:43, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 02:54, 26 August 2013 (UTC)

Daco-Romans, Vlachs and the Eastern Roman Empire are missing

I've been reviewing this article a few times. I think is well written with lots of great topics covered, albeit quite biased towards the Immigrationist theory or the "void theory" since it only covers the different nations that invaded Romania, but doesn't refer to the those who were invaded, i.e Romans, Daco-Romans, Vlachs, Byzantines almost at all. The way it stands now, it seems that the Theory of Daco-Romanian continuity is discarded completely which is not a fair or balanced approach. I think it would be more balanced if it would have sections on Daco-Romans, Vlachs, Byzantines, summarizing some of the ideas put forth in the Origin of the Romanians and pointing the reader there for more detail. Additionally, the long term presence in the Early Middle Ages of the Eastern Roman Empire in some of the territory of present-day Romania is not fully presented, again favoring the "conquering" parties and discarding the presence of the "conquered". I invite the author to expand on these topics by creating consistent sections on them out of fairness and in an attempt to reach balance.--Codrin.B (talk) 09:20, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

  • Dear Codrin.B, thank you for your message. Although I am not the author, but I do not deny that my contribution was quite crucial. Plese find my comments on your remarks here:
    • (1) The article does not mention or refer to any migration of the Vlachs/Romanians to present-day Romania. Please take into account that there are a number of references to continuity in the article. For instance, I refer to the following sentences (a) "Towns ... and the surrounding areas continued to be inhabited but the urban areas diminished" (North of the limes) (b) "...hand-made cups of the local tradition were also preserved" (Gutthiuda: land of the Goths) (c) "The Lower Danube region experienced a period of stability after the establishment of the Avar Empire" (Emergence of new powers (c. 600–c. 895)) (d) "The change of dominion had no major effect on the sedentary "Dridu" villages in the region." (Patzinakia: land of the Pechenegs) (e) "...semi-sunken huts with stone ovens from Sfântu Gheorghe, Şimoneşti and other villages evidence the survival of the local population" (Kingdom of Hungary). In my world, an article which makes mention of continuity several times, but fails to refer to migration, cannot be biased towards a migrationist theory, as you are suggesting. Borsoka (talk) 16:09, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
    • (2) The article frequently refers to the locals (to those who were invaded), and their everyday life (abodes, pottery, rituals, foods...). For instance, I refer to the following sentences: (a) "These lands were inhabited by a sedentary population engaged in farming and cattle-breeding. Pottery, comb-making and other handicrafts flourished in the villages ... but hand-made cups of the local tradition were also preserved. (...) "Sântana de Mureş-Chernyakhov" villages...comprised two types of houses: sunken huts with walls made of wattle and daub and surface buildings with plastered timber walls. Sunken huts had for centuries been typical for settlements east of the Carpathians, but now they appeared in distant zones of the Pontic steppes." (Gutthiuda: land of the Goths) (b) "The common people in Biharia, Cenad, Moreşti, and other villages lived in sunken huts covered with gabled roofs but with no hearths or ovens. They were primarily farmers, but looms, combs, and other products evidence the existence of local workshops." (Gepidia: land of the Gepids) (c) "The Huns imposed their authority on a sedentary population. Priscus of Panium refers to a village where he and his retinue were supplied "with millet instead of corn" and "medos (mead) instead of wine"." (Hunnic Empire (c. 400–c. 460)) (d) "The locals practiced an "itinerant form of agriculture", instead of manuring the soil. Differences in local pottery indicate the coexistence of communities isolated from each other by marshes, forests or hills. For instance, contemporary Cândeşti produced a significant quantity of wheel-made pottery, Târgşor was characterized by crushed-shard tempered vessels, and a sample of the most common "Kolochin" vessels was found in the Budureasca Valley. There are few known cemeteries from the second half of the 5th century, pointing to common use of cremation without the use of urns or pits. On the other hand, a huge biritual necropolis at Sărata-Monteoru produced more than 1,600 cremation burials, either in wheel-made urns or in pits without urns." (Between Huns and Avars) ..... etc, etc. Please take into account that contemporaneous sources (as it is mentioned in the article) makes only sporadic references to the territory. Accordingly, it is mainly archaeological research which reveals the everyday life of the locals. Borsoka (talk) 16:09, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
    • (3) Yes, parts of present-day Romania were under the rule of the Roman Empire/Eastern Roman Empire/Byzantine Empire even after the 270s. As far as I know, all these lands and the periods concerned are mentioned in the article. (a) Scythia Minor/Dobruja till c. 700 (Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube) (b) Sucidava and Drobeta which remained under Roman rule in Oltenia up until c. 597 (Roman provinces and native tribes / Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube) (c) Dierna and other small forts newly erected on the Lower Danube in the 290s which remained under Roman rule up until c. 360s (Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube) (d) lands in Oltenia and Muntenia between 320s and 360s (Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube) (e) lands in Oltenia and Muntenia betwen 520s and 560s (Scythia Minor and the limes on the Lower Danube) (e) Dobruja and smaller forts along the Lower Danube from 970s till 1180s (First Bulgarian Empire after conversion / Byzantine revival and the Second Bulgarian Empire). Do your relaible sources refer to other territories and periods when any of the regions now forming Romania were under Roman/Eastern Roman/Byzantine dominion after the 270s? If there are further references, please do not refrain from adding them. Borsoka (talk) 16:09, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
    • (4) There are references to individuals or groups speaking Latin in the territory of present-day Romania. For instance, I refer to the following sentences: (a) "the subjects of the Huns" spoke "besides their own barbarous tongues, either Hunnic or Gothic, or—as many as have commercial dealings with the western Romans—Latin" (Hunnic Empire) (b) a young Antian serf who "spoke the Latin tongue" (Between Huns and Avars). Actually, there are not too many sources referring to Latin-speaking individuals or groups in the period between 270 and 1210. What is the source mentioning them which you specifically would like to add? Borsoka (talk) 16:09, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
    • (5) The Vlach ethnonym is documented from the 9th century. Many references to the Vlachs/Romanians can be found in the parts of the article which describe the history of the period between the 9th and 13th century. What is the source referring to Vlachs which you specifically would like to add? Borsoka (talk) 16:09, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
    • (6) Finally, why do you think that the article "Origin of the Romanians" should be cloned? The "Origin of the Romanians" section refers to the early history of the Romanian people and there is a clear reference to the "Origin of the Romanians" article. Anybody who is interested in this specific subject, can easily find it. Borsoka (talk) 16:09, 23 September 2013 (UTC)