Talk:Romancing SaGa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Abryn (talk · contribs) 16:25, 11 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

Gameplay

I noticed that the section mentions the methods of going into battle twice ("Battles trigger when the player encounters enemy sprites in field and dungeon environments." and "Battle triggers when the player character touches an enemy character model, transitioning into the battle arena.")
- I've removed it.
Make sure to be consistent with "player" versus "players."
- Done.
I think we don't need to put LP in parenthesis, as it's used immediately after in the next sentence.
- Done.

Plot

I noticed that the third paragraph doesn't have a citation like the previous ones do.
- I've added a game-based citation.
What is the difference between the PS2 and SFC plots?
- Basically nothing. They share the same basic plot, with the PS2 version adding context and events, plus the final secret ending. I also used it as it's the only one officially released in English.

Development

Release and versions

Does there exist any secondary source on Kan Navi's development?
- I looked, but couldn't find anything. If you think it best, it can be removed.
"Artstyle" > "Art style"
- Done.
"Without appealing" > "Without intending to appeal"
- Done.
"The game was announced in September 2004 via an issue of Jump. Minstrel Song released in Japan on April 21, 2005." > "Minstrel Song was announced in September 2004 via an issue of Jump, and released in Japan on April 21, 2005."
- Done.
"A dedicated guidebook in Square Enix's Ultimania was released on July 17. It contained" > "A dedicated guidebook in Square Enix's Ultimania was released on July 17, containing"
- Done.

Music

You could say that Ito composed and arranged the music in the first sentence and cut the second.
- Done.
"Ito worked on the revised score for two years. He was joined in his work by Tsuyoshi Sekito and Kenichiro Fukui." > "Ito worked on the revised score for two years, joined in his work by Tsuyoshi Sekito and Kenichiro Fukui."
- Done.

Reception

I usually take "as of" to indicate the most recent figure, so I would swap "By" and "As of" locations.
- Done.
You should clarify in the table that the reviews are PS2, or mark them as such.
- Done.
You can probably drop GameRankings, since it's dead and the Metacritic link suffices.
- Done.
Make sure that you stay consistent between citing websites and citing writers on websites in criticism; for instance, Jane Pinckard of 1Up.com. I understand not wanting to cite "The Watcher".
- Done.

Images

The PS2 and SFC images have the same fair use rationale. Either remove the PS2 image or provide a reason to include it.
- Done.

References

Some of the sources have a name that is not italicized in the ref.
- Done my best here.

Misc

I would take away quotations around Free Scenario and Free Scenario system. Furthermore, make sure to use consistent capitalization for system.

@Abryn: I think I've addressed all the things you noted. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:53, 22 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Passed, nice job. Sorry, got bit by a wasp and got depressed, not in that order. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 05:03, 25 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]