Talk:Rock Box/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 00:19, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

• Needs alt
• Add the genres to "Music and lyrics" section removing the sources from here.

 Done

Lead

• "Hard Times" and "It's Like That" → add release date, only year. A lot like that in the rest of article as well.
• "Unity" → same as previous
• "King of Rock", "Walk This Way" and "It's Tricky". → same as previous

Quick question about it. Will post on your talk page. Andrzejbanas (talk) 17:43, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

 Done

Background

• The journalist and Run-D.M.C. biographer Bill Adler stated → Journalist and Run-D.M.C. biographer, Bill Adler, stated
• This was followed by their → different wording, two senteces start the same way
• Profile's president Cory Robbins → Profile's president, Cory Robbins,
• of "It's Like That" that the group should record an album, → of "It's Like That" the group should record an album,
• had four ready → had four
• anyways and although hip hop albums had not really sold well before → I'm having a hard time understaing what do you mean

 Done

Recording

• "The Big Beat" → release date
• The song was predominantly use → The song predominantly uses
• Smith would play the bass on the track while the guitar was performed by Eddie Martinez. Smith brought in his friend Eddie Martinez from Hollis, Queens to play guitar on "Rock Box" → Smith, who played the bass on the track, brought in his friend, Eddie Martinez, from Hollis, Queens to perform guitar on "Rock Box".
• created as the Joseph → created as Joseph
• multitracking his part which → multitracking his part, which
• "King of Rock", "Walk This Way" → add release date in between brackets

 Done

Music and lyrics

• Smith spoke about this stating his background → Smith stated that his background
• "Sucker MCs" → release date
• The lyrics of that song were involved disrespecting → The lyrics of that song were disrespected

Done, but slightly re-phrased. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:16, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• In the song, Joseph Simmons → which song?

Clarified, talking about "Rock Box". Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:16, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

 Done

Release

• Not sure this is the best section for the pictures according to its caption.

I suppose it could go in legacy section. I was trying to have some illustration stating that this was the song that specifically made Run-DMC stars (as the member says), but I could move it down. No big deal. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:27, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• which was recorded in January 10, 1984 was released → recorded in January 10, 1984, was released

 Done

Music video

• Should this be a subsection?

I figured there was enough information about the video. When doing research I saw several articles talking about it being the earliest hip hop music videos played on MTV (further research says it wasn't, I can't pin point what was, but more accurately was it was the first to go into regular rotation). When doing research on the article, I found significant information about the video, so I figured it deserved its own little bit. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:27, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@Andrzejbanas: I was thinking it deserved its own section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:20, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Sure. Andrzejbanas (talk) 00:09, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

• hip hop and to → remove and

 Done

Reception

• "Beat It" → release date

Is it appropriate to put in a year if its not part of the original quote? Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:32, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

It is, don't worry. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:24, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• "Unity" → same as previous
• Pitchfork → italic

 Done

Legacy

• My Sharona" riff on Run-DMC's song "It's Tricky" → add release dates in between brackets
• "8 Million Stories" by Kurtis Blow and "Rock Hard" → same as previous
• Chic's "Good Times" as used in "Rapper's Delight" → same as previous
• Licensed to Ill → same as previous
• Escape → same as previous

 Done

Track listing

• Fine

Credits

• expanded with information in the article → sources for it

Not quite sure what you want me to do here. If it's just to add the same sources in this section, I re-added them at the end of the sentence. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:17, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

That was it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:19, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

 Done

Footnotes

• robertchristgau.com → Robert Christgau official

 Done

Sources

• Rolling Stone → wikilink first instance and not second

Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:28, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• Los Angeles Times. → missing accessdate

That's because there is no link to the article here. I had to do some archive digging to dig it out.Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:28, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Did you dig it out? It does't look like it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:40, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

There is no online source for it is what I meant to say. :) Andrzejbanas (talk) 00:05, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

• Penguin → wikilink

linked now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:28, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• There are a ocuple more accessdates missing

I've added some for the ones that were added by the Archive.org bot (what a useful tool!) Some however were not available online, so they have no accessdate. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:28, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

 Done

External links

• Fine

Overall

• Rolling Stone source is on copyright violation, needs to be fixed See.

I believe I have covered the Rolling stone copyright issue by tightening it up a bit. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:37, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

 Done

• You can now address the comments I made. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:40, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks @MarioSoulTruthFan: I believe I've either addressed or at least commented on everything you wrote. If there is anything else to do I'll gladly take a look. How's it looking? Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:37, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Take a look at reception, music video and sources. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:42, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan:, I believe I addressed everything now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 00:15, 24 April 2020 (UTC)