Talk:Red Carpet (Namie Amuro song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 15:41, 5 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Review arriving soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:41, 5 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Point, as the singer's third → Remove comma
single; along with it came the B-side → single, being supported by B-side
It was distributed → "Red Carpet" was distributed (word rep.)
and for digital → and was made available for digital
digital consumption → link to music download
drums through its instrumentation → drums as instrumentation
it focuses → you have already used "it" before; alternate
reviews from music critics. Majority of the reviews commended → reviews from music critics, with them commending
highlighted → highlighting
was used as the commercial track to a campaign → was used for a campaign
and included → and was included
Japan, and additionally throughout Asia. → Japan and Asia.

Infobox

CD and digital artwork. → Artwork used to physically and digitally commercialize the single (no full stop)

Background and release

music video; she also added → music video, and unveiled
the B-side track → its B-side track
having released "Tsuki" (January 2014) and "Brighter Day" (November 2014) → having made available for purchase "Tsuki" (2014) and "Brighter Day" (2014)
was used as the theme song to Japanese anime series → served as the opening theme for Japanese anime series
whom previously → who previously
and noted instrumentation of guitars → and described its instrumentation as consisting of guitars
reporting from Land of Rising → writing for Land of Rising
composition as a → composition a
link "pop" to respective article on Wiki
Add release year in brackets to the two linked singles
Lyrically, it focuses → Do you mean "Red Carpet" here or "Black Make-Up"? If yes, then insert the title instead of "it"
narcissism; subsequently, the line → narcissism, with the line,
was described → being described
the sound as an "upbeat neo soul tune" → the sound as "upbeat neo soul".

Release

Please attach this section to the previous one
Dimension Point, as the singer's → remove comma
and for digital → and was made available for
with two videos (the official music visual and the making of video) → with the single's official music video and behind-the-scenes footage
red silk fabric, resembling the aesthetic of a red carpet; she is wearing the → red silk fabric, which resembles the aesthetic of a red carpet, wearing the
The physical formats included → Physical releases of "Red Carpet"

Reception

the composition production → the recording's production
'breaking any boundary or reaching outstanding levels..." → "breaking any boundary or reaching outstanding levels [...]"
appeal; the review also highlighted → appeal, additionally highlighting
the songs production and composition → the production and composition of "Red Carpet"
esque content → esque vibe (word rep.)
it debuted at number two on Oricon's weekly chart → it opened Oricon's weekly chart at number two
copies, marking it the → copies and marking the
first week → first-week
Add year of release to other linked singles here
highest charting → highest-charting
after her triple → behind her triple
units and marked its final week → units in its final week
all hosted by → all published

Promotion

on the singer's → onto the singer's
sits down briefly → what is this supposed to mean?
public out including → public, including
walking about a flight of stairs → this is poor grammar and I don't get what you want to say.
used on Japanese → used for Japanese
as the commercial track → as the opening theme
theme song to Japanese → theme song for Japanese
in Japan, and additionally throughout Asia → in Japan and Asia

Credits and personnel

flawless ;)

Charts

You don't need two separate columns; render them together with the subtitle "Weekly charts"

Sales

You don't need a separate section for the sales; please add it as a subsection to "Charts and sales"

Release history

flawless ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

2.9% is perfect!

Images and others

Article is perfectly illustrated by cover artwork.

Links

No problems here!

References

For cases like Jpopasia.com or Namiestyle.co.jp, please write like this: JPop Asia, Namie Style
As far as I was able to check them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
No dead links! Good job!

Good job with this!

On hold! Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:49, 10 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: all done! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 01:01, 18 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:02, 18 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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