Talk:Red Carpet (Namie Amuro song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 15:41, 5 December 2016 (UTC)

Review arriving soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:41, 5 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Point, as the singer's third → Remove comma
• single; along with it came the B-side → single, being supported by B-side
• It was distributed → "Red Carpet" was distributed (word rep.)
• and for digital → and was made available for digital
• digital consumption → link to music download
• drums through its instrumentation → drums as instrumentation
• it focuses → you have already used "it" before; alternate
• reviews from music critics. Majority of the reviews commended → reviews from music critics, with them commending
• highlighted → highlighting
• was used as the commercial track to a campaign → was used for a campaign
• and included → and was included
• Japan, and additionally throughout Asia. → Japan and Asia.

Infobox

• CD and digital artwork. → Artwork used to physically and digitally commercialize the single (no full stop)

Background and release

• music video; she also added → music video, and unveiled
• the B-side track → its B-side track
• having released "Tsuki" (January 2014) and "Brighter Day" (November 2014) → having made available for purchase "Tsuki" (2014) and "Brighter Day" (2014)
• was used as the theme song to Japanese anime series → served as the opening theme for Japanese anime series
• whom previously → who previously
• and noted instrumentation of guitars → and described its instrumentation as consisting of guitars
• reporting from Land of Rising → writing for Land of Rising
• composition as a → composition a
• link "pop" to respective article on Wiki
• Add release year in brackets to the two linked singles
• Lyrically, it focuses → Do you mean "Red Carpet" here or "Black Make-Up"? If yes, then insert the title instead of "it"
• narcissism; subsequently, the line → narcissism, with the line,
• was described → being described
• the sound as an "upbeat neo soul tune" → the sound as "upbeat neo soul".

Release

• Please attach this section to the previous one
• Dimension Point, as the singer's → remove comma
• and for digital → and was made available for
• with two videos (the official music visual and the making of video) → with the single's official music video and behind-the-scenes footage
• red silk fabric, resembling the aesthetic of a red carpet; she is wearing the → red silk fabric, which resembles the aesthetic of a red carpet, wearing the
• The physical formats included → Physical releases of "Red Carpet"

Reception

• the composition production → the recording's production
• 'breaking any boundary or reaching outstanding levels..." → "breaking any boundary or reaching outstanding levels [...]"
• appeal; the review also highlighted → appeal, additionally highlighting
• the songs production and composition → the production and composition of "Red Carpet"
• esque content → esque vibe (word rep.)
• it debuted at number two on Oricon's weekly chart → it opened Oricon's weekly chart at number two
• copies, marking it the → copies and marking the
• first week → first-week
• Add year of release to other linked singles here
• highest charting → highest-charting
• after her triple → behind her triple
• units and marked its final week → units in its final week
• all hosted by → all published

Promotion

• on the singer's → onto the singer's
• sits down briefly → what is this supposed to mean?
• public out including → public, including
• walking about a flight of stairs → this is poor grammar and I don't get what you want to say.
• used on Japanese → used for Japanese
• as the commercial track → as the opening theme
• theme song to Japanese → theme song for Japanese
• in Japan, and additionally throughout Asia → in Japan and Asia

Credits and personnel

• flawless ;)

Charts

• You don't need two separate columns; render them together with the subtitle "Weekly charts"

Sales

• You don't need a separate section for the sales; please add it as a subsection to "Charts and sales"

Release history

• flawless ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 2.9% is perfect!

Images and others

• Article is perfectly illustrated by cover artwork.

Links

• No problems here!

References

• For cases like Jpopasia.com or Namiestyle.co.jp, please write like this: JPop Asia, Namie Style
• As far as I was able to check them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
• No dead links! Good job!

Good job with this!  On hold! Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:49, 10 December 2016 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: all done! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 01:01, 18 December 2016 (UTC)

Gladly passing! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:02, 18 December 2016 (UTC)

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