Talk:Raynald of Châtillon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 02:07, 22 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 02:07, 22 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No copyvio/dablink/external link issues. Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:54, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General

I think the article should follow BE throughout. If you like I have a script to do this.
We generally mention people by their surnames after they have been introduced. There seems to be some inconsistency on this in the article.

Lead

Most historians have regarded Raynald...nearby Muslim states. Maybe this line in the lead could be more precise in what parties have supported him and who have opposed him.

Early years

but Jean Richard demonstrated Raynald's kinship with the Lords of Donzy When exactly did this revelation come?
Steven Runciman says that Raynald Sounds somewhat informal, "According to Steven..." would be better

Prince of Antioch

Duplink: William of Tyre

Family

Constance was born in 1128. She succeeded her father in Antioch in 1130 Short sentences, can be combined

Lord of Oultrejordain

Subheadings would be helpful.
Duplink: Bohemond III of Antioch

Legacy

Peter of Blois dedicated a book (entitled Passion of Prince Raynald of Antioch) to him When was it published?

Images

I would suggest similar modifications to the captions as in Constance of Antioch. Nothing mandatory, though.

Sainsf, thank you for your comprehensive review. I hope I could properly modify the article. Sorry, I do not understand the expression "BE" in the first sentence. Borsoka (talk) 01:17, 24 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

BE=British English. Not a necessity for GA, but it is preferable to follow a style. Presently, I will be promoting this. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 10:56, 24 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]