Talk:Randeep Hooda/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:03, 29 January 2016 (UTC)

I'll finish this one today JAGUAR  14:03, 29 January 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• I would definitely recommend merging the last sentence of the lead "In addition to acting in film and theatre, Hooda regularly..." into the paragraph before it, in order to improve prose flow per WP:LEAD

 Done

• "in Melbourne in Australia" - just Melbourne, Australia would do fine
• "After D Hooda worked on a series" - a comma is needed between 'D' and 'Hooda'

 Done

• "a US-Trained Obesity Medicine Specialist"- does 'Obesity Medicine Specialist' need to be capitalised? Even if so, I would definitely un-capitalise 'trained'

 Done

• "Hooda belongs to a Jat family,[6] As a child Hooda studied" - full stop needed after 'family'. Alternatively, de-capitalise 'as'

 Done

• The very last sentence in the Early life and background section needs a citation

 Added

• "Randeep has been honored by Sandeep Marwah with the life membership of International Film And Television Club of Asian Academy of Film & Television at Noida Film City" - unsourced

 Removed

• "in the role of a violent criminal"[28] Rajeev Masand wrote" - missing full stop. Needed after the quotation mark

 Done

• Ref 14 is dead

 Fixed

On hold

This is a comprehensive and decent article, well done on all the work put into this! Once all of the above are addressed, I'm sure it will have no problem passing. JAGUAR  14:56, 29 January 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for taking up the review so quickly! Made all the ends mentioned! Waiting to hear back from you. All your help is greatly appreciated! :) Numerounovedant Talk 21:40, 29 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! Without further ado I'll promote this. Good luck at college! JAGUAR  01:22, 30 January 2016 (UTC)