Talk:Rabbit/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Reconrabbit (talk · contribs) 01:11, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: DoctorWhoFan91 (talk · contribs) 18:14, 3 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one; article is kind of long, so expect initial comments in the next 48-72 hours. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 18:14, 3 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It's a long article, so I will go heading by heading.

Lead

the ancestor of the world's hundreds of breeds[1] of domestic rabbit: sounds weird to be, consider rephrasing
Sylvilagus includes 13 wild rabbit species: The Sylvilagus genus includes ...
Why are these two genus mentioned specifically, and not the others? Explain in the para(are they the most numerous, the most common, the most ...?)
- I rewrote that first paragraph to clarify why those genera mattered.

Terminology and etymology

The word rabbit itself derives...[8]: Make this the first para, and complete the route; what does the root word mean
derived ultimately from the Latin cuniculus: What does cuniculus mean/is derived from
Are you sure the refs for litter(Mereck Vet Manual), or "colony or nest"(Collective Noun Page) reliable?
- Etymology has been expanded. I have confidence in the authors of the Merck Vet Manual and the Collective Noun Page is drawing from James Lipton's book, which is about the best we can get for this type of information in my opinion.

Taxonomy

some of the genera and species: some of the extant genera and species
Can the images and list be presented better? To reduce the amount of scrolling required (maybe as a table, but that might be a bit complex to make)
- I'm working on the table, shouldn't be a huge project.
  - @DoctorWhoFan91: I changed it from a gallery to a simple list and cladogram, how does it look? Should I add the extinct species? Recon rabbit 14:41, 8 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It looks great! You do not need to add the extinct species- would make the list look unnecessarily cluttered. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 19:14, 8 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

In culture

of the figures.[151] The rabbits' role: Split the para here, and merge the corresponding para with the newly formed para
- Done.

Folklore

Change section title to "Mythology and Folklore"
Remove the main article wikilink from here(if you want, merge from that article's folklore section to here, instead of the opposite)
Add the Easter bunny and just write mentioned above or something like that
The rabbit often appears in folklore as the trickster archetype as he uses his cunning to outwit his enemies.: Only example given is Central Africa, so just merge with that
The rabbit as ... a popular cartoon character.[176]: Makes these two paras the last paras
Make the current two last paras and the two paras mentioned above under a new section, such as modern times or something (choose a good subheading)
The Br'er rabbit is both folklore and modern, so mention in both with the diff refs, Disney under modern and A-A under folklore
The mix of bullet points and paras would look weird, consider choosing one type and make it coherent
Images would go under folklore, not Modern times, if it ends up confusing

Review 1/3

I'll review the other headings later. The article is very well written for such a complex topic, well done. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 08:09, 6 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Reconrabbit: F, I keep forgetting to ping. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 17:38, 6 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I saw the changes on my watchlist, no problem. I'm working on things as I can. I will admit that in my initial run through improving the article, terminology was one section I didn't really touch upon. Recon rabbit 18:02, 6 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

As food and clothing

falling to 0.03 kg (0.07 lb) in Japan. The figure for the United States was 0.14 kg (0.31 lb) per capita.: listing the three highest and then lowest seems jarring, reword; I don't think listing the data for the US is necessary
Not required, but can the last two paras be expanded, they seem small.
- I removed the unremarkable production values and expanded the paragraphs mentioned from the related articles.

Ecology

retina that both: retina where both
{{The doe (mother) ... feed the kits.[114]}}: Weirdly worded, and cited by a weird-ish source?
Rabbits are prey animals and are therefore constantly aware of their surroundings. For instance, in Mediterranean Europe, rabbits are the main prey of red foxes, badgers, and Iberian lynxes.[110]: Mention they are preys, the animals that prey on them, and then their awareness, seems non-sequitur-ish right now
A 2003 study found that "the (so-called) Chinese rabbits were introduced from Europe", and that "Genetic diversity in Chinese rabbits was very low".[122]: rephrase, jumps from South America to China arbitarily(Maybe "a 2003 study on rabbits in China ...)
- I've made a bunch of changes to this section. It may warrant further work depending on if "Behavior" should be moved elsewhere as it looks to be a bit out of place to me but there's no obvious place under "Biology".

Biology

. This way they can be distinguished from rodents.[18]: , a manner in which they differ from rodents
These bones are created ... called the foot.: confusing, wikilink the bone names, or explain more?
Rabbits stay just on their toes when moving; this is called digitigrade locomotion.: Already mentioned, remove
The force put out by the hind limbs is contributed by both the structural anatomy of the fusion tibia and fibula, and muscular features.[54]: Explain(might relate to point 2)
In Ears, just remove the subheadings, just separate paras for each third of ear is good enough
Thermoregulation is the process that an organism uses to maintain an optimal body temperature independent of external conditions.[70] This process is carried: Thermoregulation is carried (it's already wikilinked, so no need to explain)
Rest of it, I'll review later

Review 2/3

@Reconrabbit: Added more remarks, only need to remark on half of the Biology section later(plus spot-check). DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 10:23, 8 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think every concern in Biology has been addressed - except for the stuff on musculature of the hind legs, I have to track down "Rabbits: the animal answer guide" as all the literature I can find doesn't have as much to say about the specific bones. I had to do a lot of digging to figure out why some of this stuff was relevant. Recon rabbit 21:09, 8 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Biology

These compounds include fructose, citric acid, minerals, and a uniquely high amount of catalase.: Does this help in reproduction or just in general?
Meanwhile, IGKC1 shows high amino acid divergence between domesticated types and ferals derived from them.[107] This can be as high as 40%.[107]: Importance/Effect of this?
It has spread to the point that it is considered endemic in the western United States.: Still?(Update if necesaary)

References

Ref 6- just remove it, there is an additional ref?
Ref-172(native-languages.org)- is this reliable?
All refs via EBSCOhost: if these are books, just cite the books- they aren't accesible either way
- I removed the URLs since they won't be accessible to most users but kept the "via". Ref 6 has been removed in favor of the Lipton work. Native-languages.org is a non-profit written by a subject matter expert, which is as good as I could find for this particular info. I expect a lot of this is oral history, and it's nice to have a website that presents this freely.

Overall

@Reconrabbit: That's the end of my review; ping when you are done replying/editing, I'll do the spot-check at the end. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 13:51, 8 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Just the spot-check remains, will do it in 4-6 hours; will also add 'domestic' per the suggestion, wherever necessary. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 12:37, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think I've addressed everything now. Recon rabbit 17:05, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done the spot-check, passing the article. Congratulations Reconrabbit, and well done! The article was well-written and you always went far and beyond my suggestions, very diligent. Keep up the good work! (P.S.- Seeing that you are also taking part in the GAN backlog drive, would you like to review any of the articles nominated by me?) DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 06:32, 10 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Spot-check

Due to the number, I'll check every 15th ref, in general

Ref-1: Middle Dutch robbe ... unknown origin
Ref-16: at the K-T boundary
Ref-31: no active antagonism
Ref-46: at Tsagan Khushu, Mongolia
Ref-61: identify ... potential threats.
Ref-76: oral pharynx from the lower airways.
Ref-92: level of prolactin rises
Ref-106: insufficient dietary crude fiber
Ref-121: only about 11 months.
Ref-136: a strong-smelling waxy substance.
Ref-152: aid in hunting
Ref-166: tissue ... especially rabbits ... mouth
Ref-183: cosmological traditions of the Algonquian tribes
Ref-201: unwritten rule ... not use the word rabbit.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments from Hemiauchenia

This article has always had major scope issues. It's not clear whether this article is supposed to be about (a). non Lepus (hare, jackrabbit etc) members of the family Leporidae (b.) about members of the genus Oryctolagus (which includes the wild European and domestic rabbits). When the term "rabbit" is used in the article, it is often unclear which meaning is meant. When veterinary sources and the like (which are extensively cited in the article) discuss rabbits, they mean Orcytolagus specifically (and usually even more specifically just domestic rabbits) , not all non-Lepus leporids. Because this article confusingly mixes the two different meanings of the word "rabbit" together as if they are the same when they are clearly not, I would oppose passing the article in its current state. I think this could be remedied by changing mentions of "rabbit" to "domestic rabbit", when sources are specifically discussing domestic rabbits. Hemiauchenia (talk) 23:30, 8 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for bringing this to our attention and the suugestion to fix it, Hemiauchenia; I'm not sure I would have noticed that while doing the spot-check and passed it erroneously. Reconrabbit, can you check the sources with vet in the name and fix them if they are talking specifically about domestic rabbits(and a line in the lead that rabbit colloquially usually emphasises just Orcytolagus, given that the genus name is actually already present in the lead). DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 10:34, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have been aware of this. Most of my effort to avoid conflating "European rabbit" with all non-Lepus leporids has been focused outside of the biology section. I'm looking into it. Recon rabbit 11:25, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Great! I was wondering why I barely noticed it during the review. Good job. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 12:17, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Lime

>contains rabbit

11/10 would bnuuy again– Closed Limelike Curves (talk)