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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 00:06, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:06, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Runtime and budget usually have citations in the infobox.
- That being said, the runtime doesn't need to be sourced in the lead.
- In the first note, can a more reliable source be added rather than using Amazon.com?
- Shouldn't BBC (or the network the shorts originally aired in) be mentioned in the infobox or in the lead?
- Add a comma after "Milo O'Shea".
- "minaturised" → "miniaturised"
- Corrected everything but the Amazon reference. I searched far and wide for a better source for this info but drew blanks. Not perfect, I know, but one fears I can't do much about this (the woes of detailing obscure films).
Plot and cast
[edit]- "after it find" → "after it finds"
- Add a comma after "Terry, Angus, Carol".
- I suggest changing "Danger" to "The danger" as it sounds better.
- The plot section is under 700 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
- Per WP:FILMCAST, roles such as "Headmaster" and "Meter Maid" should be lowercased.
- Corrected.
Production
[edit]Development and direction
[edit]- Don't put AllMovie in italics, in this section and in the rest of the article.
- Add a comma after "associate producer".
- "only which" → "only one which"
- Corrected.
Screenplay and visuals
[edit]- Optional, but can the uses of "..." here and in the rest of the article be changed to "[...]"?
- Instead of a note about the budget, I think it would be easier to use the template for inflation in the UK.
- Corrected ellipses. I'll confess, I don't know how to use the alternative template. If you feel RPI is insufficient I'd appreciate your own input.
Music
[edit]- Add a comma after "Phil Collins".
- Corrected.
Response
[edit]- No issues here as this section looks great.
References
[edit]- Link all linkable websites/publishers/agencies in this section.
- There's a reference titled "Shail, The Children's Film Foundation, p. 114." and then multiple citations simply left as "Shail, p. 28.". I suggest adding a #Bibliography section to make things simpler (as in the GA-articles The Sound of Music (film) and The Good, the Bad and the Ugly) or, if you choose, you make just make the citations more consistent.
- Corrected. Believe I got all the links, at least! Alas, some were too obscure for Wiki at present.
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- Really appreciate you taking a look at this, Some Dude From North Carolina! Let me know if you require any further input. Curlymanjaro (talk) 22:49, 1 March 2021 (UTC)