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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:25, 25 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This is going to be reviewed by me today! --K. Peake 06:25, 25 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Write the genre out in the body to avoid using a citation in the infobox
  • Done.
  • It wasn't actually on the album, it was a non-album single.
  • "It was released on" → "The song was released on"
  • Seems a bit repetitive, no? The sentences before and after also use "song" or "the song".
  • Move the release sentence to being after the writing/recording and inspiration sentences
  • Change the part after the recording to merely "during the sessions for the album."
  • See above.
  • Remove introduction to Dylan Thomas because that is sufficient solely in the body
  • Done.
  • "though Davies's resulting character" → "though his resulting character"
  • Done.
  • Remove the English composer introduction to David Whitaker since that is sufficient in the body only
  • Done.

Background and inspiration

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  • Maybe you could write the genre out here and try titling in Background and composition?
  • Done.
  • "beyond have having the same name." → "beyond having the same name."
  • Fixed.
  • Quote box and second para look good, apart from the lack of a genre mention in the latter
  • Done.

Recording and release

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  • "as the song's producer." → "as the song's sole producer."
  • Seems like an unnecessary word to me.
  • I don't think it would be correct to use a semi-colon because "either Alan MacKenzie or Brian Humphires" is not an independent clause (MOS:SEMICOLON).
  • Remove wikilink on Rasa Davies since she does not have her own article or even a section
  • Done.
  • "to possibly features a" → "to possibly feature a"
  • Done.
  • "Davies selected "Polly" to" → "Ray Davies selected "Polly" to" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
  • I forgot to fix all these instances when I added Rasa's name in. By MOS:SAMESURNAME, I've changed the rest to "Ray" rather than "Davies".
  • "was "more rhythmic," → "is "more rhythmic,"
  • Done.
  • Any more reviews you could add here?
  • I unfortunately haven't been able to find any. Given that the A-side "Wonderboy" was such a failure, there was little attention afforded for this B-side.
  • "roughly a tenth of" → "roughly a 10th of" per MOS:NUM
  • I only see MOS:FRAC mentioning to avoid using ordinals like -th when spelling out fractions. Anyway, by MOS:FRAC, I've changed "a tenth" to "one-tenth".
  • "among the fifteen tracks" → "among the 15 tracks" per above
  • "The song has since" → "It has since"
  • Done.
  • Done.

Personnel

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  • Remove wikilink on Rasa Davies
  • Done.

Notes

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  • Good

References

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Citations

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  • Good

Sources

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  • Done.
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  • Tkbrett You should swap the release sentence with the writing/production since the creation comes before the actual release, also still introduction the record as their sixth studio album even though this is not part of it. --K. Peake 08:20, 27 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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