Talk:Pimpin' (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jivesh boodhun (talk · contribs) 12:32, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The sample sample should be only 18 seconds long. Read WP:Music Samples. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:35, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I see August 30, 2005 and Digital download. So was it released? At least to radio? Or a digital outlet?
- I can't find any actual reference (at the usual sources, such as FMBQ or Mediabase) that says that the song was ever officially released to radio, so I presume that the airplay was unsolicited: I can also find no reference to a CD single, so I have listed digital download as it is the only format in which the song can be purchased separately (the date is thus the release date of the album "Pimpin'" appears on). See "Migrate (song)" for a similar example. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Link rapper to Rapping
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
who also helped to write the song with Yayo ---> who also helped in the writing process with Yayo
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Musically, "Pimpin'" is a rap song expressing Yayo's desire to be able to legally pimp women, and is backed by an upbeat, "bouncy" production containing elements of digital guitar. ---> Break the sentence into two shorter ones.
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
others felt the song out of character ---> ???
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 17:34, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Not peaking but charting. According to the sentence, peaking does not make sense.
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Read WP:NUMBERS
Avoid overuse of the word song

Link chorus and verse to where appropriate. Ask for help if you do not know the correct links.
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
to many of the other songs ---> to many other songs
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I love the job here.

but criticized the song's concept ---> its
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
criticized the song's tempo ---> the tempo of "Pimpin'"
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
the song's music video was the only thing making the song ---> it
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
more positively of the song ---> "Pimpin'"
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
despite noting that "Yayo's old mix-tape career gets cannibalized" for the song, he felt that "simplicity kind of works for Tony", although he also wrote that "it's not the real G-Unit manifest destiny" ---> Re-write
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 17:34, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Try to avoid overuse of the word song

Read WP:NUMBERS and apply it.
debuted on the US Billboard Bubbling Under R&B/Hip-Hop Singles chart at number eleven for the chart week dated August 6, 2005 ---> debuted at number 11 on the US Billboard Bubbling Under R&B/Hip-Hop Singles chart issue dated August 6, 2005
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Apply the format above in the lines that follow
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Link music video
- Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No mention of video in the lead?
The music video for "Pimpin'" was released as a double-music video along with the video for the single "Curious", which is also present on Thoughts of a Predicate Felon: although the section containing the footage for "Curious" appears first on the video, it is positioned immediately after "Pimpin'" on the album's tracklisting, appearing at number ten ---> A pain to read this and to understand it.
- Done Scrapped most of this, as it isn't really needed. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 17:52, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

1. Remove author

8. Publisher is Todd Burns

Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

12. MTV will do in the place of MTV music + it should not be in italics.

Done I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Busy tonight, so I've fixed everything I can do for now: I'll finish off tomorrow. Thanks. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 22:31, 9 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]