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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

General

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  • All mentions of 50 m, 100 m and 200 m would be better off being spelt out

Done Kees08 (Talk)

Early life and education

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  • "Pilar Shimizu was born May 27, 1996, in Tamuning, Guam." - Pilar Shimizu was born in the Guam city of Tamuning on May 27, 1996.
  • "Shimizu learned to swim at age four and started training at age seven." - This sentence needs to be cited to a reliable source.
  • "Shimizu is studying public health at Johns Hopkins University, " - link Johns Hopkins University

Done Kees08 (Talk)

Collegiate career

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Olympic career

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  • "She was the youngest Guamanian Olympian ever" - in history
  • "Shimizu set the national record for the 100 m breaststroke (set by Tammie Kaee) during the 2012 London Olympics" - established and during the Games
  • Also, you should add mention of the 20-year old part to the record that Shimizu broke as you have done in the lead
  • "She decided to put her swimming career on hiatus" - start this sentence with Shimizu

International career

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References

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  • Reference seven is lacking the author of the article
  • The access date for Reference fifteen is missing

On hold until all of my concerns have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 10:01, 14 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Ready for you to take a look (I had a couple questions above). Kees08 (Talk) 06:22, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]