Talk:Pilar Shimizu/GA1
Appearance
GA Review
[edit]GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
General
[edit]- All mentions of 50 m, 100 m and 200 m would be better off being spelt out
Early life and education
[edit]- "Pilar Shimizu was born May 27, 1996, in Tamuning, Guam." - Pilar Shimizu was born in the Guam city of Tamuning on May 27, 1996.
- "Shimizu learned to swim at age four and started training at age seven." - This sentence needs to be cited to a reliable source.
- "Shimizu is studying public health at Johns Hopkins University, " - link Johns Hopkins University
Collegiate career
[edit]- "she was part of the 200 yard medley relay" - link 200 yard medley relay to 200 metres individual medley
- Well, the 200 yard is technically different from the 200 meter isn't it? Kees08 (Talk)
- D'oh so it is. My mistake.. MWright96 (talk) 11:55, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
- Well, the 200 yard is technically different from the 200 meter isn't it? Kees08 (Talk)
- "The team received First Team All-America" - Wikilink All-America
- "and competed for the NCAA Championship." - try and find the apporiate wikilink for the NCAA championship that Shimizu competed in
- So...apparently Johns Hopkins is DIII so there will not be an article for it. I can make a redlinked version? Kees08 (Talk)
- Only if there is a great deal of independent reliable coverage. MWright96 (talk) 11:55, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
- So...apparently Johns Hopkins is DIII so there will not be an article for it. I can make a redlinked version? Kees08 (Talk)
Olympic career
[edit]- "She was the youngest Guamanian Olympian ever" - in history
- "Shimizu set the national record for the 100 m breaststroke (set by Tammie Kaee) during the 2012 London Olympics" - established and during the Games
- Also, you should add mention of the 20-year old part to the record that Shimizu broke as you have done in the lead
- "She decided to put her swimming career on hiatus" - start this sentence with Shimizu
International career
[edit]- Wikilink 2009 East Asian Games
- The link to Oceania Swimming Championships should be directed to 2010 Oceania Swimming Championships
- "In the 2015 Pacific Games, Shimizu earned a silver medal in the 50 m with a time of 33.35." - try: In the 2015 Pacific Games, Shimizu earned the 50 meters silver medal with a time of 33.35 seconds.
References
[edit]- Reference seven is lacking the author of the article
- The access date for Reference fifteen is missing
On hold until all of my concerns have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 10:01, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
@MWright96: Ready for you to take a look (I had a couple questions above). Kees08 (Talk) 06:22, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
- @Kees08: Alright I have answered your questions and can now promote this article to GA status. MWright96 (talk) 11:55, 19 April 2018 (UTC)