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Reviewer: Regards, SunCreator (talk) 00:00, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing this version of the article. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 00:00, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Read previous peer review.

Well-written: (minor issues) Pass

Spelling: deaceased to deceased. longterm to long-term. frolicing to frolicking. Jackon to Jackson. emphazising to emphasizing
 Done Pyrrhus16 10:28, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
longterm?  Fixed Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:02, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Grammar: 'became addicted to prescribed pain medication.'
 Done I re-worded the sentence to "became addicted to prescription medication." Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:32, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Misc: dependent = addicted? judge to Judge. Lead linking done again in body.
 Done Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:32, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
addicted edit introduced grammatical error and I noted it because it's duplicated in the text several times. see below
Un-linking of items in lead only partly done. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:02, 10 March 2010 (UTC)  Fixed[reply]

Factually accurate and verifiable: Pass

'more charities than any other musician' - usatoday source says 'most charities supported by a pop star'
 Done Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:09, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Broad in its coverage:Pass

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias.: Pass

Charities claim above. Final image.
 Done Fixed the charity involvement (above) and I removed the photo of the Jackson supporter in the final section of the article (I presumed you were referring to that photo). Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:12, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, the photos slogan, "Jackson is Innocent" was not neutral.
Charity claim seems undue in sentence.  Fixed Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:02, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The article has this re-occuring thing about painkillers/medication etc. It's doesn't seem to have relevance to 'Personal relationships', so I'm going to edit review those bits. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:39, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
LEAD:Presley supported Jackson as he became dependent on pain medication, eventually getting him to enter drug rehabilitation.
Lisa Marie:Fuelled by her past addictions and the death of her father, Presley supported Jackson as he became addicted on painkillers
Divorce(Lisa Marie):She had supported him as he faced allegations and became dependent on pain medication.
Debbie Rowe:Like Jackson's first wife, Rowe supported the entertainer as he was accused of child sexual abuse and became addicted to prescription medication.
Removed text in Debbie Rowe section.  FixedRegards, SunCreator (talk) 12:47, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Illustrated, if possible, by images:Pass

File:Michael_Jackson_1988.jpg - checked
File:JosephJackson2007(cropped).jpg - checked
File:Lisa Marie Presley at car race.jpg - checked
File:MichaelJacksonDebbieRowe1.jpg - checked
File:Michael_Jackson3_2006_(cropped_version).jpg - checked

Passing the nomination

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All things considered I think it's now a Good Article. Congratulations. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:52, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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