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Good articlePeople Take Pictures of Each Other has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
August 6, 2022Good article nomineeListed

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This is going to be reviewed today! --K. Peake 07:16, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Done.
  • Make the second sentence one mentioning the song's writing, singing and recording date
  • Done.
  • Follow the above with the inspiration, then one sentence of comp and lyrical meaning
  • Done.
  • Remove the sequencing sentence since that is not notable and the album can be mentioned in the first sentence
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  • "The recording features a" → "The song features a" moving this to the comp/lyrics part like I said
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  • Remove session keyboardist introduction to Nicky Hopkins
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  • "and others comment that its" → "Others comment that its" to avoid a run-on sentence
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  • "The Kinks performed the song" → "The Kinks performed "People Take Pictures of Each Other""
  • Done.

Background and composition

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  • Quote box looks good!
  • This section seems disordered; shouldn't you write about inspiration and its place on the album in background then follow with comp and lyrics of the song itself?
  • Yeah, you're right it was a little out of order. I swapped paragraphs so the composition is discussed before its relation to the other songs on the album, which I think makes sense chronologically.
  • "and Davies further stated in" → "and Davies eventually stated in"
  • How about simply "... and Davies stated in ..."
  • "encourage nostalgia while misleading" → "encourage nostalgia and mislead"
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  • "Davies wrote it specifically" → "Davies wrote the song specifically"
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  • Remove wikilink on "Pictures in the Sand"
  • I think it's acceptable by WP:NSONG: Songs that do not rise to notability for an independent article should redirect to another relevant article, such as ... a prominent album ...
  • "to photographs,[6] and" → "to photographs and" moving [6] solely to the end of the sentence
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  • "where the latter features a" → "with the latter featuring a"
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  • "it serves as a commentary on the album's other tracks," → "the song serves as a commentary on the other tracks,"
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  • "thinks the song's closing lines" → "thinks the closing lines"
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Recording and release

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  • Done.
  • "and fast a breathless lead vocal" doesn't make much sense, unless you meant to write "a fast, breathless lead vocal"?
  • Yes, that was a typo. Fixed.
  • "rather than hiring session musicians to play it." → "rather than working with hiring session musicians." to be less repetitive
  • How about ... rather than working with hired session musicians.
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  • Remove wikilink on Pye Records
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  • "well without it."" → "well without it"." per MOS:QUOTE
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  • "barely notice it."" → "barely notice it"."
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Other versions

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  • First para looks good!
  • "The American rock band" → "American rock band" to avoid starting two consecutive sentences with the
  • Done.
  • "over time, adding in part:" → "over time, further adding:"
  • Done.

References

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  • Copyvio score looks solid at 34.6%!!!
  • Remove the author from ref 29 since staff is not a person
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Sources

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Final comments and verdict

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