Talk:Pakistan at the 2010 Winter Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:31, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

Will read this article and leave comments. MWright96 (talk) 08:31, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "He was also the country's opening and closing ceremonies flag bearer." - change to Abbas was also the country's flag bearer in the opening and closing ceremonies.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

Background

• Wikilink Naltar Valley and Ski Federation of Pakistan
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Link 1948 Games to 1948 Summer Olympics
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Wikilink the word opening to 2010 Winter Olympics opening ceremony and closing ceremonies to 2010 Winter Olympics closing ceremony; also the same needs to be done in the lead
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

Alpine skiing

• "He trained for two weeks in 2008 and six weeks in 2009 in Austria," - try and six weeks in Austria in 2009
  • Done, not sure it sounds better though. Kees08 (Talk)
• " since he did not have money to compete in other competitions." - change to contest to avoid close reptition of the same word
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "The event was supposed to start on February 21, but was postponed two days to allow for another event to take place." - source? and which event exactly?
  • Added the event and moved the reference closer to the material
• "His total was 3:20.58, for 79th place overall," - total time
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

References

• Reference 1 is missing the author who wrote it
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Reference 7's publisher The Star needs to be in the work field
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

That's all from my side. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 17:38, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: Think I got it all. Kees08 (Talk) 03:40, 12 July 2018 (UTC)

• @Kees08: Good work. Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 08:20, 12 July 2018 (UTC)