Talk:Now That You Got It/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 10:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Full review coming soon. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Flawless. Just put the year of "The Sweet Escape Tour" between brackets. Done

Background and release

"Swizz Beatz and he said he was working with Stefani as well" - re-write sentence. For example: "...and he said to be working with Stefani as well"

Done

"Two remixes were included on the CD single, both featuring Marley. The "remix" version is a more reggae-infused rendition, while the "hybrid" version features the song's original beat mixed with the remix version." - What do you mean with "hybrid"? Does it have the same instrumental as the single, different lyrics? Be precise.

Done

Composition and lyrics

"The original version". How about the single version?

Done

I see no reference to the "reggae fusion" genre.

Done

Any digital sheet music?

Much like the case with Asking 4 It, there is no readily available sheet music on Sony ATV's website, or any other reliable source for that matter

Ok then. Done

I was thinking about adding a sample, however, I'm unsure since it's maximum length would be, "0:15". What do you think?

I agree that it would be rather short if included. Carbrera (talk) 21:56, 3 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You could include anyway. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:48, 4 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

"and Sal Cinquemani of Slant Magazine called it "instantly contagious"." → and Sal Cinquemani, while reviewing the album, of Slant Magazine called it "instantly contagious".

Done

"Alex Miller of the NME, however"→ Before "Alex" needs a linking word that helps discern the "favorable" reviews from the "critics" one.

Done

"John Murphy of musicOMH was mixed" → I know what you mean, but you can't write it like this. It seems the reviewer is mixed, just like mixed nuts! "John Murphy of musicOMH gave the single a mixed review, writing". No need for "that".

Done

"making songs which are all strident and sleek and modern and shiny and brassy and tough on the outside, but which have a delicate core in the middle which is pure and vulnerable and nervous and a little timid" → use your own words.

Done

Commercial performance

moderate success on the charts. In the United States, it was commercially unsuccessful..." → Needs an "however, nevertheless...". moderate success on the charts. Nevertheless, in the United States..."

Done

"her lowest-selling solo single" → How do you know? I don't see sales references.

Done

"In Australasia, the single performed very moderately..." → Full stop after moderately. It debuted at...

Done

Music video

"part of The Sweet Escape Tour" → as part of The Sweet Escape Tour

Done

"Many parts of the video were shot in a studio." → any example

Done

" The video premiered on MTV's Total Request Live on September 4, 2007." → reference?

Done

Storyline

"The chorus begins and Stefani, Harajuku Girls and Marley and playing board games under a shelter near the lake side." → "As the chorus begins Stefani, the Harajuku Girls and Marley are playing board games under a shelter near the lake side."

Done

"The video concludes with Harajuku Girls and the boys on the roof, Stefani and the girls singing on the scooters." → Doesn't flow well the part "on the roof, Stefani and the girls".

Done

Everything else is fine, but how about some sources to back up such description?

I don't see any description on the website you provided. Not done

I haven't found any sources to back up the description minus the official music video, so I have added that for now. Carbrera (talk) 21:30, 18 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The official video is just fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:20, 19 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

"Stefani's first performance of the track was on the UK's television show Ant & Dec on September 29, 2007. She performed the original version of the song, but ended with a reggae mix". → other source that is not YouTube. The channel that uploaded that must have violated copyright issues.

Done

Any reviews regarding that performance?

"several critics appreciating the energy of the performance." → I see one critic. Not done Done

Track listings

References? I see none.

Done

Credits and personnel

I would link mastering, keyboards, mixing and so on. Only once each one of them.

Done

Charts

Just fine.

Done

Release history

You have a "scope="row"" in Europe, delete it.

Done

Find another source that is not Discogs. Not reliable.

Done I removed it

References

Some references have publisher and work, others only have work. Choose one of the options.

Done

Reference 23 is dead. Replace it and archive it.

Done

End of GA Review:

Once more a great article, straight to the point with minor fixes in a couple of places. I will put it on hold while you address the concerns. Any doubts or other suggestions just tell me. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:30, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have been extremely busy and although I expect to comply to your suggestions shortly, it may take longer than seven days. I hope you understand, thanks. Carbrera (talk) 01:43, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@MarioSoulTruthFan: May I request another week to review these suggestions? I apologize for any inconvenience. Carbrera (talk) 00:59, 2 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: It's fine by me. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 09:13, 2 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: I have changed the article accordingly. Please take a look at the article when you can. Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 22:58, 3 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: I have checked what you did. I left some comments. You missed one issue at the "Background and release" section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:59, 4 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Finished the final touches! Thanks again. Carbrera (talk) 21:34, 18 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Gladly passing. Good luck on your GA cup. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:27, 19 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]