Talk:New York Savings Bank Building/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 01:29, 15 August 2023 (UTC)

To begin review.--ZKang123 (talk) 01:29, 15 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Quickfail checks:

• Photos are free-use
• Earwig shows some reuse of common phrasings. Might watch out for those that can be easily rewritten: "The bank was founded in 1854", "moved out of the building"

Prose comments:

• "contains porticos and a dome" – "features porticos and a dome"
• "and there is a dome placed asymmetrically" – "a dome is placed asymmetrically"
• "originally contained the name" – "was originally inscribed with the name"
• "There are stone pedestals with vitrines in front of these blind panels" – "In front of these blind panels are stone pedestals with vitrines."
• "The two outer bays, on either side of the entrance, contain blind panels rather than windows at the first story." – "The first story of the two outer bays, situated on either side of the entrance, features blind panels instead of windows."
• "The 14th Street elevation is asymmetrical because of its internal layout; it is divided vertically into three sections." – "Because of its internal layout, the 14th Street elevation is asymmetrical and divided vertically into three sections."
• "each of which contains a" – "each of which has a"
• "There are guttae beneath each window sill" – "Beneath each window sill are guttae"
• "The tops of the pilasters contain egg-and-dart moldings and anthemia, and the outermost two pilasters contain paneling." – "Egg-and-dart moldings and anthemia embellish the upper sections of the pilasters, while paneling adorns the outermost two pilasters." Or rewrite such to remove recurrences of "contain"
• "This sign is triangular and contains a pair of clock faces." – "This sign is triangular with a pair of clock faces."
• "and there is a vitrine below each clock face." – "and below each clock face is a vitrine."
• "There is a copper domed roof above the gabled roof." – "Above the gabled roof is a copper dome"
• "Although the roof is three stories high, different parts of the interior contain between one and three stories, as there are some triple-height spaces." – "Although the roof is three stories high, the interior features varying levels, ranging from one to three stories, with several areas incorporating triple-height spaces."
• "was the banking room, which was accessed" – "was the banking room accessed"
• "There was an "L"-shaped beige-marble tellers' counter, which was placed about 15 ft (4.6 m) away from the west and south walls." – "An "L"-shaped beige-marble tellers' counter was placed about 15 ft (4.6 m) away from the west and south walls."
• "Each of the ceiling's coffers contains an embossed rosette at its center" – features an embossed
• "That October, the bank filed plans for yet another revision to the plans, this time proposing to" – "filed versions to the plans, proposing to"
• Wikilink World War II
• "$1,504 million" – for a moment I thought it should be 1.504... then I realized it would be much less...
• "The facade was cleaned in 1945" – wouldn't polished be a better term?
• "89 Eighth Avenue, next to the bank building's annex, in November 1952." – remove the commas
• "was considering" – considered
• "There was also a hole in the roof, which prompted concerns" – "A hole in the roof prompted concerns"
• "the banking hall to designs by Scarano, Englert & Norton." – you mean "the banking hall designed by Scarano, Englert & Norton."
• "that dated from 1952" – "dating from 1952"
• "operated for three years, closing suddenly in April 2009." – I don't think it's necessary to state it has been opened for three years. "but closed suddenly in April 2009."
• Are there reasons for the sudden closure? (Source mentions about restructuring)

Article is rather brief compared to many of your buildings' articles, but still informative and comprehensive. Putting review on hold.--ZKang123 (talk) 06:28, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for the review @ZKang123. I have now addressed almost all of these (except for the 1,504 million figure, which should really be 1.504 billion due to inflation). It's a relatively small bank, so I really wasn't able to find as much info on this building compared to some of the other structures I've written about. Epicgenius (talk) 15:07, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

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