Talk:Nest of Angels/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 16:46, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I don't know if it is necessary to cite the title in an article about the title. We're using the episode itself as a reference for that. Also, if you must keep Ref. 1, fix the parenthesis in the parenthesis. It looks funny.
Intro: "Brenton and the producers made the episode with much research to provide a balanced view towards Islam, as well as the nature of the plot" -> "Brenton and the producers researched elements of Islam in order to o provide a balanced view towards the religion, as well as the nature of the plot"
Intro: Comma needed after "however"
Plot: I'm not sure, but I think "west" should be capitalized in the plot section.
Plot: disired -> desired
Plot: "Tom is okay" Maybe a bit too colloquial. How about "Tom is unharmed".
Writing: "after the audience watch the episode" should be either "after the audience watched the episode" or "after the audience would watch the episode"
Writing: "He included characters who were innocent Muslims who oppose the extremists from their religion, and a "Muslim hero" to thwart the terrorists." -> "He included characters, such as innocent Muslims who opposed the Islamic extremists, as well as a "Muslim hero" who would thwart the terrorists."
Writing: "The ending was written to be melancholic, a conclusion that there were no winners." -> "The ending was written to be melancholic, in which there were no winners."
Casting: "The episode included a guest appearance from Alexander Siddig, who was well known as playing regular character Julian Bashir in Star Trek: Deep Space Nine, played the "Muslim hero" Muhammed Ibhn Khaldun." -> "The episode included a guest appearance from Alexander Siddig, who played the "Muslim hero" Muhammed Ibhn Khaldun. Siddig was already well known as playing regular character Julian Bashir in Star Trek: Deep Space Nine."
Casting: "The producers thought Siddig as a "noble" actor when playing the character." -> "The producers thought of Siddig as a "noble" actor when he was playing his character."
Casting: "It also sees" -> "The episode also marks"
Filming: "The episode was directed Bharat Nalluri, he" Either put a semi-colon instead of the comma after Nalluri, or add 'and' in there
Controversy: "members of the broadcasters believed that viewers realises" -> "members of the broadcasters believed that viewers realised"
Controvery: "drama about this - it is topical" & "suicide bombers inside - kill the bombers" Change the dash to an en-dash (–)
Are there any critical reviews? Usually, those are important for an episode article.

I'm afraid not. However, the extent of the controversy the show attracted more or less warrants the article's notability. -- Matthew RD 16:03, 14 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

References: You use parenthesis inside parenthesis quite a bit. It's OK just to say "Spooks Series 2"
References: Every appearance of the show should be italicized

That's all. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:23, 13 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed the above issues, hope this helps. Thanks for the review. -- Matthew RD 16:03, 14 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. I will pass. Congrats!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:49, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]