Talk:Myxomatosis/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: I'll take this one. Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 14:06, 31 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

This article reads well and is nearly ready for GA. However there are some mainly formatting issues that need to be resolved first.

References 1, 2, 6, 8 etc are all to the same paper by Anna Meredith and should be merged to a single named ref (e.g. <ref name="Meredith 2013">.....</ref>, second and subsequent times <ref name="Meredith 2013"/> with no further definition) with a page range that spans the whole paper (pages=705-714). If a paper is really long (say, over 100 pages) then it might make sense to use a subrange or individual page ref but frankly for papers of normal length we just cite the whole paper. Y

You'd forgotten the closing "/". I've fixed it for you... Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:28, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Aha! Thank you!! Rabbit Vet (talk)

Similarly, Peter Kerr's 'Viral Infections of Rabbits' refs 4, 7, 9 etc need to be named and merged. Page range is pages=437-468 (well within the acceptable range limit). Y

Same for Kerr 2015. Page range is 1020-1061. BTW there are multiple authors here, it would be best to cite them. The DOI tool (http://reftag.appspot.com/doiweb.py) does this automatically. Y

Several statements give the impression of being uncited. On inspection it seems likely that these are from the same sources used earlier in their paragraphs. Please either move the refs to paragraph end or name and repeat the refs for clarity. Y

Hopefully I fixed this. Let me know if I missed any.

Please remove all spaces before ref tags. Y

I think this is fixed.

Ref tags go after punctuation. Y

I think this is fixed.

'Other preventative measures' uses a bulleted list, which comes across as pure How To advice, which isn't really allowed on Wikipedia. I suggest you reword it as a paragraph of text, not a list, so that it comes across as measures that can be taken, e.g. "The risk of a pet's contracting myxomatosis can be reduced by preventing contact with wild rabbits." (This example also removes the "your" style, which we don't use either.) Y

Done

"European rabbits (Oryctolagus cuniculus)": please format species names in italics. You've done this already below under 'South America'; the species name should be removed from there as we only need to define it once. Y

Fixed! Rabbit Vet (talk)

We only need one image of a rabbit with the virus (and we only use one image in the lead). Y

The Californian viral strain causes symptoms that look different from the South American strains present in Europe and Australia. Thus we need at least two photos. I will clarify this in the image captions. Rabbit Vet (talk)

Is there an electron micrograph of the virus available? Y

Yes. I added it to the diagnosis section. Rabbit Vet (talk)

Thanks!

The bulleted list of 'Clinical presentation' would be better formatted as a table with a column for Days on the left, Symptoms on the right. Y

Done

There is scope for an image of the tapeti or brush rabbit in the 'Cause' section. Y

Put one in! Rabbit Vet (talk)

I suggest you use the attached historic image in the 'Australia' section. Y

Thanks, that's a great pic Rabbit Vet (talk)

There is scope for a map of dissemination in the 'population control' section. If there is a Public Domain or CC-by-SA map we could use that; or we could prepare a simple world map with dates (if you twist my arm, perhaps). Better would be a map with dated 'contours' of spread across Australia. Y

That sounds cool, but I am unable to locate such a map, or data we could use to create such a map (would be data from the 1950s).

Ok, it's not a requirement. I ~~may~~ have produced a simple one with the dates in the article already. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:23, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

'selection' should be wikilinked to natural selection. Y

Done

'genetic resistance' should be wikilinked to disease resistance. Y

Done

You mention that the disease has been extensively studied for "what occurs when a virus jumps from a species adapted to it to a naive host"; there should be a matching section 'Research' that highlights the uses that the disease has been put to in research (NOT just research on the disease). This should be based on secondary or tertiary review sources, not on primary scientific papers. Y

I'm not entirely clear on what you would like to see here re: research. There is lots of research on the myxoma virus and its uses in human medicine, but I assume this is better discussed on the myxoma virus page so I put information on it there. For the paragraph on this page I did change the reference from a primary to a secondary source, and reworded the paragraph a bit. Let me know if this meets your needs, thanks!

That's great, thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 06:59, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

You might want to consider using File:Evolutionary History of MYXV.tiff to illustrate your Research section. Y

Added

There is no need for the single ref in the lead section (indeed, if there were, it should all have been cited). Y

Okay, I removed it.

Best explain what "an amyxomatous form" means. Y

Let me know if I have clarified it sufficiently.

Summary

Good work. That all seems to be done and I'm satisfied the article is well up to GA standard. I hope you'll consider reviewing one or two of the articles waiting for GA on the nominations page. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:55, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]