Talk:My Future/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:32, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Me taking this one is fully called for, as you have two songs nominees in the queue right now! --K. Peake 17:32, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Why is R&B listed before lo-fi in the infobox when it is the other way round everywhere else in the article?
• Wikilink all lowercase instead per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "American singer Billie Eilish, released..." → "American singer Billie Eilish from her upcoming second studio album, Happier Than Ever (2021)."
• Make the single release date the third sentence, changing to "It was released the lead single from the album..." with the wikilink; add the date and labels at the end of the sentence
• Remove the set release date of the album and the ref, as that belongs in the first sentence and the exact date is not notable
• "Eilish co-wrote it with" → "Eilish co-wrote the song with" making this the second sentence instead for correct order
• Remove uptempo from the lead, as the term is not notable for here
• Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
• "and the effects it had on her outlook on life and the future" this part does not seem to be sourced plus having so much lyrical description is excessive; you should keep the preceding and succeeding parts
• The first sentence of the second para should be one about the reception of the song not the accolades
• "in 2020 year-end lists by" → "on 2020 year-end lists by multiple publications, including"
• Remove introduction to Andrew Onorato, as doing so in the body is sufficient enough
• "was praised by music critics for" → "was praised by critics for"

Background and release

• None of the first sentence is backed up by the sources, but maybe you could mention from them that Eilish had recorded for the 007 soundtrack?
• The post is not sourced since the article does not display the Insta post; either use a different source or add a working archive

Yes it does. The Billboard source shows Eilish's post...

• "On July 27, Eilish" → "On July 28, 2020, Eilish" per the source
• "the cover art, which features a drawing of herself" → "the animated cover art, which depicts her" with the pipe, per the source
• The tomorrow caption is not backed up; again, either add a different source or use an appropriate archive
• "Eilish states: "We" → "Eilish stated: "We"
• "this is the most" → "This is the most" per the source
• "pouring rain. It was" → "pouring rain. [...] [I]t was" for correct paraphrasing
• Pipe Finneas to Finneas O'Connell since this is the first mention of him
• [9] should be at the end of the other sentence not the one with [8], as it backs up the later one's comments alongside [10]

I'm very confused by what u mean here.

The PF ref should be at the end of the "in it for yourselves." sentence instead. --K. Peake 08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)

• "Eilish added: "it was" → "Eilish added that "it was"
• "along with her brother Finneas O'Connell," → "alongside her brother Finneas O'Connell, who has the stage name of Finneas,"
• "both of whom also served as" → "both of whom served as"
• Either mention the song being the lead single in the download and streaming sentence if you can find a source, or add a sentence afterwards about it being set for release on the album

Composition and lyrical interpretation

• Wikilink uptempo per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Pipe R&B to Contemporary R&B
• Add a comma after ballad
• Wikilink jazz to itself instead
• [14][15][16][17][18] is too many refs at the end of the sentence, so move appropriate ones to after the comma that only back up those parts and the ones that are used for both, well keep them at the end
• Sabrina Claudio is not one of the artists mentioned in the vocal stylists quote
• "in current trends."" → "in current trends"." per MOS:QUOTE
• Wikilink upbeat plus move [20] to being at the end of that sentence as well as the other one

Again, don't know what you mean.

The MTV ref should be at the end of this sentence too. --K. Peake 08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)

• "mentions the track beat" → "mentioned that the track"
• "voices [by] [Finneas]" and that "My Future"," → "voices", contributed by Finneas, further saying "My Future"" but the Finneas vocals part is unsourced, also why is [21] here?
• "states "My Future"" → "stated that "My Future""
• "drums and guitar." → "drums, and guitar."
• Pipe Vulture to Vulture.com
• "says the track" → "said the track"
• Pipe Disney to The Walt Disney Company
• "it is about a powerful ode" → "the song serves as a powerful ode"
• "and her future first." → "and her future first:"
• The quote should actually be "I've changed my plans/Cause I/I'm in love/With my future" towards the end, plus add [26] at the end of the sentence too since it backs up the a cappella part
• "But by the time song gets to a minute and 45 seconds, a percussive beat" → "Later on in the song, a percussive beat" but the part about speeding up is not sourced
• The "Know I'm supposed to..." line is sourced as starting the part afterwards, while the previous line is not mentioned so remove
• "as a" recently household name adjusting to fame", but" → "as a recent household name adjusting to fame, but"
• Remove speech marks around as an evolving songwriter
• The penultimate quote should start with a double speech mark rather than an exclamation
• "know myself". Eilish" → "know myself", Eilish"
• "as a "funky" bass line also appears." → "before a "funky" bassline appears." with the wikilink
• "with the lyrics:" → "with the line:"
• "in a couple years."" → "in a couple years"."

Critical reception

• "received critical acclaim" → "was met with critical acclaim"
• Pipe music critics to Music journalism
• Remove comma after The A.V. Club
• "and Brittany Spanos writing for" → "and Brittany Spanos, writing for"
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
• "duubed the song as" → "dubbed the song as"
• "and addded it" → "and added it"
• "John R. Kennedy of iHeartRadio" → "John R. Kennedy of iHeartRadio Canada" with the pipe
• "and "uncomplicated" and felt" → "and "uncomplicated", and felt"
• Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Not too sure about the reliability of PopBuzz, as they only have 8 team members
• Pipe electronic to Electronic music
• Italicise Idolator
• "which he describes has "reflect[ed]" → "which he described as "reflecting"
• Remove or replace Hollywood Life because that is an unreliable gossip site
• "the track has a starts off slow, with a "shimmering" intro, and" → "the track starts off slow with a "shimmering" intro and" plus move this to being part of the second para instead

 Not done it's fine in the 3rd para

You are supposed to have split the rankings into the accolades sub-section, rendering this para too short once done. --K. Peake 08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)

• The list placement should be under accolades instead
• Insider is not spelt correctly
• "and further praised" → "further praising"
• "gentle", and never" → "gentle" and never"
• "She concludes saying" → "She concluded by saying"

Year-end lists

• Retitle to Accolades, as the ranking on Eilish's songs can be moved here
• Write this out in prose since five is not really enough for a table; you don't need to use comments for every ranking though

Commercial performance

• Add release year of "Bad Guy" in brackets
• "to number one during" → "to the summit during"
• "Eilish's first number one hit on that chart." → "Eilish's first track to top the chart."
• It also topped the Hot Alternative Songs chart says the source, not Alternative Rock
• "on the Alternative Digital Song Sales charts history.[44] Imagine Dragons" → "in the chart's history,[44] while Imagine Dragons"
• "through July 31 and Aug" → "from July 31 to August"
• "It ranked up to" → "The song ranked up to"
• "dated Aug 9, 2020." → "dated August 9, 2020."
• "of 40,000 units." → "of 40,000 units in Canada."
• Are you sure there is supposed to be a dash in top-20 like is done for top-10 and top-five?

Yes, I am pretty sure.

Music video

Background and synopsis

• Pipe animated to Animation on the img text, but remove the pipe in prose since this should have been done earlier
• "the same day the single" → "the same day as the single"
• Ian Ballantyne, João Monteiro, Josh Trotter, Keith Kavanagh, Maddie Brewer and Sean Anderson are not sourced as animators
• "The video has been" → "The visual has been"
• Eilish wearing a necklace with a logo and the neon part of her green hair are not sourced
• "as she contemplates about" → "while contemplating about"
• The part about a sign of her hopeful future is not sourced, unless I missed something?

Critical reception

• "positively received by music critics upon its release." → ""positively received by critics upon release."
• NPR should not be italicised
• "was a "fairy tale heroine" and that the song" → "is a "fairy tale heroine" and that the video"
• "Ronia Aniftos writing for Billboard" → "Ronia Aniftos, writing for Billboard,"
• Add commas after writing for Bustle magazine like above
• "My Neighbor Totoro and Kiki's Delivery Service." → "My Neighbor Totoro, Kiki's Delivery Service." plus maybe add the release years of the movies in brackets?
• "Emma Steen, noted the video "lack[ed]" → "Emma Steen noted the video "lack[s]"
• "said it was a" → "said it is a"

Live performances

• This section is fine since like last time, there will probably be more performances in the future but shouldn't you mention Eilish's speech from before performing the song at the DNC?

I am going to try and find more live performances to add after I get my second covid vaccine.

She performed the song at 2020 Jingle Bells iHeart Studio, NPR, Tiny Desk, and Sirus Xm from what I found. Miley Cyrus cover in the Live Lounge should also be mentioned. Cheers, MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 09:09, 12 May 2021 (UTC)

Add the ones that MarioSoulTruthFan mentioned. --K. Peake 08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)

Personnel

• Retitle to Credits and personnel
• Pipe Wurlitzer electric piano to Wurlitzer electronic piano
• Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

Weekly charts

• Remove Adult Alternative Songs per WP:USCHARTS

Year-end charts

• Good

Certifications

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Release history

• Format → Format(s)
• Label → Label(s)
• The refs should be centered
• No various release is backed up for the first one, as the ref only leads to one citation that is for the US

References

• I can't access the copyvio score for the song right now, but it does not seem like you have used excess quoting so this should be fine.
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Cite Uproxx as publisher instead for ref 6
• Cite Idolator as work/website instead for ref 7
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10
• Use the numerous citations template to back up a various release for ref 12
• Cite NPR as publisher instead for ref 14
• Author-link Jon Pareles and Jon Caramanica on ref 17
• Remove pipe on Vulture for ref 23
• WP:OVERLINK of Pitchfork on ref 22 (I can see you have not followed the wikilink on each occasion version so overlinking applies)
• WP:OVERLINK of NME on ref 29
• iHeartRadio → iHeartRadio Canada on ref 30, piping to Bell Media Radio
• Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) on ref 31 per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Remove or replace ref 35 per my earlier comment
• WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on refs 38, 43 and 44
• WP:OVERLINK of Stereogum on ref 40
• WP:OVERLINK of USA Today on ref 42
• Solely cite Recording Industry Association of Malaysia as publisher for ref 49, plus add Facebook under via parameter
• WP:OVERLINK of Rolling Stone on refs 67 and 88
• Cite BBC as publisher instead for ref 91
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 92 and add publisher or work/website

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but unfortunately this was a bit more messy than your previous works. --K. Peake 08:57, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I have responded to ur comments above. Shoot for the Stars 💫 (talk) 03:22, 12 May 2021 (UTC)

Shoot for the Stars Nice, but there's still some stuff that needs to be done. --K. Peake 08:31, 13 May 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Please give me a day or to finish up the article. This is my last week of high school before I graduate and start getting ready for college. It's also very hard to use any computer when I'm around my parents who despise electronics and always want me to be studying or working. Shoot for the Stars 💫 (talk) 05:43, 17 May 2021 (UTC)

Shoot for the Stars Yes I can wait, especially since I am busy with work often nowadays. --K. Peake 09:00, 17 May 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake I have fixed the issues and added live performances. Sorry it took so long. I was busy getting my cap and gown ready for my graduation that is happening this Thursday. Shoot for the Stars 💫 (talk) 05:19, 22 May 2021 (UTC)

Shoot for the Stars ✓ Pass now, you must have got confused with the accolades query so I fixed that bit for you! --K. Peake 08:27, 22 May 2021 (UTC)