Talk:Moonshine (Bruno Mars song)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 21:52, 26 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: What source are you questioning the reliability of? Carbrera (talk) 21:53, 26 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: reference number 10. Thanks for picking up this! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:04, 26 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

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Lead

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" Commercially, "Moonshine" charted only in South Korea, where it reached number 17, along with the released of its parent album." --> " Commercially, "Moonshine" charted only in South Korea, where it reached number 17, along with the release of its parent album."

I don't understand what is the change here?

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Remove the extra 'd' after "release". Carbrera (talk) 02:21, 29 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Background and Release

Please rename "Background and release"

Done

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""Moonshine" was released digitally in the United States (US) on 19 November 2012 as part of the iTunes countdown through Atlantic Records as the second promotional single.[5]" --> ""Moonshine" was released digitally as a promotional single in the United States on November 19, 2012 as part of the iTunes countdown through Atlantic Records.[5]"

Done

I know you were doubting the reliability of Reference #10, but since it's a blog rather than an actual publication, I'd remove it. Also, you have Reference #9 backing up the statement so I believe that would be just fine. What do you think?

Reference nine just says that moonshine will be released in Germany, nothing else. the other is the replacement around the same dates. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 01:01, 29 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrics

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Please link "Billboard" to its respective article

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What about: "On the other hand, a writer for Neon Limelight commented that the "Mars croons about escaping to ecstasy in a bottle of his favorite vice". Using the lyrics on the first verse and the chorus, "Oh moonshine, take us to the stars tonight/Take us to that special place/That place we went the last time, the last time", as evidence.[20]" --> "On the other hand, a writer for Neon Limelight commented that the "Mars croons about escaping to ecstasy in a bottle of his favorite vice"; using the lyrics on the first verse and the chorus, "Oh moonshine, take us to the stars tonight/Take us to that special place/That place we went the last time, the last time", as evidence.[20]"

Done

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There is an extra space after Los Angeles Times that needs to be removed Done
"desesperation" isn't a word → Can't even copy paste properly anymore. Done

Critical Reception

Please rename "Critical reception"

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"avoid comparisons between the track and Michael Jacksons' work.[16][22][24]" --> "avoid comparisons between the track and Michael Jackson's work.[16][22][24]"
Rest is great

Done

Chart performance

""Moonshine" debuted at number 17 on the "South Korea International Download Chart," " --> I don't think you need quotation marks around this

Done

Track listing

"Digital Download" --> "Digital download"

Done

End of GA Review:

On hold for seven days. Good luck and thanks as always! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 18:38, 28 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]

@Carbrera: I left some questions. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 02:07, 29 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: I have addressed everything but reference 9 see above my comment. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:12, 29 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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