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"American rapper Pop Smoke featuring" → "American rapper Pop Smoke, featuring"
"from the formers" → "from the former's"
Add release year of the album in brackets
"alongside Lil Tjay who" → "alongside Lil Tjay, who"
"Dizzy Banko, and Kiwi." → "Dizzy Banko, while Kiwi contributed co-production."
"A remix featuring" → "A remix that features"
"while an EP was released" → "while an EP was released for the song" to avoid confusion with the remix
Why does the lead say that they "sing about" the subject when the body says the performers "rap about" it? Singing and rapping are two different things...
"received generally positive reviews" → "received mixed to positive reviews" because the reception demonstrates the latter, not the former
"including Norway, where it" → "including Portugal, where it"
"in The United States by" → "in the United States by"
"Jordyn Woods and Dylan" → "Jordyn Woods, and Dylan"
"was made and" → "was made for the song and"
"David Wept and features Lil Tjay and his girlfriend, Lala Baptiste," → "David Wept, and features Lil Tjay and Lala Baptiste" since not only should she solely be introduced in the body, but the succeeding prose here mentions them being in a relationship anyway
"to further work on it. Lil Tjay" → "to further work on it; Lil Tjay"
"alongside Lil Tjay who" → "alongside Lil Tjay, who"
"handled "Mood Swings" programming." → "handled the programming for "Mood Swings"." with the target
"Beat Menace, Dizzy Banko, and Kiwi." → "Beat Menace and Dizzy Banko, while co-produced by Kiwi." removing the following sentence, as Tidal credits co-producers under producers too and those who served as producers are the ones that are only credited for that production classification
"She stated she" → "The singer-songwriter stated she"
"on an EP of the same name," → "on an EP for "Mood Swings" of the same name," to be specific
"percussive production which" → "percussive production, which" with the target
"artists' amorous lyrics"." → "artists' amorous lyrics."" for consistency
"Pop Smoke and Lil Tjay "effortlessly" raps" → "Pop Smoke "effortlessly" raps" since the source only mentions him rapping; this should be changed in the lead too
Could you add some info about Lil Tjay's verse here?
"the song, along with "Something Special", is so romantic," → "the song and "Something Special" are so romantic" to not read confusingly with the quote that follows
"noted that Pop Smoke sounded" → "noted that Pop Smoke sounds"
"the unsettling lyrics"." → "the unsettling lyrics.""
The Atlantic's Hannah Giorgis → Giorgis, as you have already introduced her, plus this review should not be at the end of the section since it belongs with the positive ones
"The remix of "Mood Swings" featuring Summer Walker also received" → "The remix of "Mood Swings" was received with" because the original did not receive generally positive reviews, unlike the remix
"Jordyn Woods and Dylan" → "Jordyn Woods, and Dylan"
"post that captioned:" → "post that he captioned:"
"and the Gonzalez," → "and the Gonzalezes,"
"as they fix their hair," → "while they fix their hair," to avoid repeating "as" too closely
[43][44][46][47][48] should not all be at the end of the sentence since five refs is too many; move around to being after appropriate commas for a few or more
Remove or replace Hollywood Life since that is an unreliable gossip site
"the song a huge failure. They deemed it was not enough" → "the song a huge failure, deeming that it was not enough"
Remove Apple Music from the title of ref 8 and change the publisher to having NZ following it in brackets
WP:OVERLINK of The Fader on refs 9 and 44
WP:OVERLINK of NME on ref 14
WP:OVERLINK of The Atlantic on ref 17
Either add an archive to ref 41 or cite a different URL since that does not back up the position
WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 45
Remove or replace ref 46 per my earlier comment
WP:OVERLINK of Rap-Up on ref 53
WP:OVERLINK of Rolling Stone on ref 67
Shouldn't hitparade.ch be cited as publisher instead on ref 69?
I been told that you don't need to remove the links for the magazines or websites for the refs. Take a look at "Blank Space" for example. The article is at FA and the overlinking wasn't brought up at all during the FAC review. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 02:14, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
On hold until the issues are fixed, but this is a reasonably large article so you definitely deserve the congrats up to this point! --K. Peake17:43, 9 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Not done, doesn't need to be mentioned a lot. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 02:14, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
Not done, seems awkward when read out loud. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 02:14, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
On hold until the issues are fixed, but this is a reasonably large article so you definitely deserve the congrats up to this point! --K. Peake 17:43, 9 January 2021 (UTC)