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Featured articleMichael Francis Egan is a featured article; it (or a previous version of it) has been identified as one of the best articles produced by the Wikipedia community. Even so, if you can update or improve it, please do so.
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DateProcessResult
October 16, 2015Good article nomineeListed
May 31, 2016Featured article candidatePromoted
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on November 2, 2015.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Michael Francis Egan served as the first Bishop of Philadelphia from 1808 to 1814?
Current status: Featured article

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Michael Francis Egan/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Relentlessly (talk · contribs) 20:08, 9 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this. Relentlessly (talk) 20:08, 9 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Relentlessly: are you still interested in reviewing this? --Coemgenus (talk) 13:48, 15 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, I'll be working on it today. Relentlessly (talk) 14:26, 15 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

I'm very, very nearly happy to pass this as a good article. There are a few comments I would make about things that could be tightened up.

  • "Serving as a priest in Rome, Ireland, and Pennsylvania, he became known as a gifted preacher." This might be pedantry, but I can't see why the first clause is subordinated to the second. I would write this more plainly as "He served as a priest in Rome, Ireland, and Pennsylvania and became known as a gifted preacher."
  • "Early biographers believed Egan was possibly born in Galway" I can't check the source here. Did the early biographers think there was uncertainty about where he was born? That's the implication of "possibly". If that is what is meant, it could usefully be clearer. Otherwise, lose "possibly".
  • "custos of Ennis" Translation, please?
  • "the problem of orphaned children having been made worse by the yellow fever deaths" This dangling modifier isn't terribly elegant. I'd suggest "as the problem of orphaned children had been made worse by the yellow fever deaths".
  • "When they arrived" Surely the papal bull is singular?
  • "Bishops-elect Benedict Joseph Flaget and Jean-Louis de Cheverus". Can I suggest "Benedict Joseph Flaget and Jean-Louis de Cheverus, who had been appointed/elected to bishoprics but had not yet been consecrated"? I've no problem with the former, but my suggestion is a bit more explicit for the non-expert.
  • "the trustees there were perturbed at Egan's appointment of an Irish priest to lead the parish temporarily, until a German priest could be found" This reads better without "temporarily,", as it suggests that the trustees were perturbed temporarily, rather than the leading being temporary.

These are all minor niggles, though: it's a very good article. Relentlessly (talk) 16:03, 15 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]