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To confirm

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  • Also, I included "Roy Keller (1954–2006), Vicki Keller (2006–present)" under the "Owners" parameter in the infobox, though confirmation is required as to whether Keller still owned the business in 2006, when he died at age 90, or if he transferred the business to his daughter before then. Just making notes here. Thanks! -Another Believer (Talk) 19:33, 10 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Finetooth: You didn't happen to come across info about the business before Mary Duerst Hemming took over ownership, did you? If the info isn't available, that's fine, but right now there is detail about when the business was actually established. Even a decade would be helpful. Thought I would ask! --Another Believer (Talk) 19:16, 27 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

No. What was it called before it became Mary's Club? Finetooth (talk) 21:02, 27 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Not sure. Perhaps it was even called "Mary's" if her husband named it after her. Thanks for responding. --Another Believer (Talk) 21:06, 27 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

To Do: Interior photograph. I'm scared! (Not really, but just a little...) --Another Believer (Talk) 16:33, 31 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You might as well cross that one off the list since it's probably not allowed. Viriditas (talk) 09:06, 17 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

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Extended content

--Another Believer (Talk) 03:40, 23 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Good article

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I am co-nominating this article for good status, along with User:Finetooth, who also worked to expand this article. I was not sure which GAN subcategory to associate this article with. Is there one for business? Is this culture and society? I went with "miscellaneous" for the time being. I believe this article meets good article criteria, and with a bit more expansion, could even meet featured article criteria. First strip club FA, anyone? (I admit that I plugged a few of the outstanding sources into the external links section, but they do not really include content that is not incorporated in some way already, and this should not affect good standing.) I cannot request a copy edit by GOCE yet (I have reached the request limit), but will do so as soon as possible. I look forward to the GOCE and GA reviews. --Another Believer (Talk) 15:34, 31 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

User:Another Believer, I would place it under "Economics and business" because it is only an informal landmark. However, if it was official, it might go under "Culture, sociology and psychology". Viriditas (talk) 03:49, 11 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the suggestion! Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 03:57, 11 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

User:Another Believer, for consistency please add the year of release to Dangerous Pursuit in the following sentence: "Films that include scenes shot at Mary's include Bongwater (1997), Brainsmasher... A Love Story (1993) and Dangerous Pursuit (1990)." I realize that it's only a made-for-TV film, but these days, all works are treated the same in terms of adding release dates. Thanks. Viriditas (talk) 09:02, 17 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

 Done Thanks for the reminder. This was not a purposeful omission on my part. --Another Believer (Talk) 15:20, 17 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

IMO, you've got too many direct quotes and not enough paraphrasing. The quotes are necessary in some instances, such as describing an important opinion by a notable person about the club. But for the most part, there's too many of them that aren't needed, and this interferes with the flow of the prose and the enjoyment of the reader. See if you can identify unimportant quotes that can be eliminated and adequately paraphrased. Viriditas (talk) 20:47, 17 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

--Another Believer (Talk) 21:38, 17 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

That's a good start, but be careful that you don't accidentally introduce plagiarism by simply removing quotes without also paraphrasing in your own words. Remember to rewrite and rephrase when you remove the quotes. Viriditas (talk) 23:17, 17 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I am making what I believe to be good edits. Do feel free to improve further as you see fit. --Another Believer (Talk) 00:48, 18 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I won't be editing this article. I came here from GAN in the hopes of reviewing it. FWIW, the page history shows you removing quotes from "for more than 20 years" and "tattooed contortionist entertainers". If all you did is remove the quotes without paraphrasing, then we generally consider that inadvertent plagiarism. That's why you have to be careful and always rewrite and paraphrase appropriately. Viriditas (talk) 00:53, 18 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I was not sure how to re-word "for more than 20 years", so I figured maybe that is something that is generic enough to not require quotation marks. If "tattooed contortionist entertainers" is specific enough to require quotes, that's fine. I am just trying to learn the boundary here. I went ahead and reverted to the original state (before my attempt to correct). Will try again when I have time. --Another Believer (Talk) 01:12, 18 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Should these require quotes?

  • The former owner was Mary Duerst Hemming, who won the piano bar in a divorce settlement and operated the business "for more than 20 years" …?
  • He introduced "pasties-clad topless dancers" in 1955
  • She was said to excel in discothèque, "shaking and undulating" to the…? Or, change to simply "dancing to the…"?
  • Keller, said to resemble "a church deacon", praised his dancers…?
  • I assume from above that "tattooed contortionist entertainers" should remind in quotes.
  • Does this diff look ok?
  • Any problematic sentences in the Reception section?

Thanks, truly, for any feedback. --Another Believer (Talk) 01:25, 18 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seattle (talk · contribs) 22:36, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • No DAB links, no dead links, though several links are described as "expiring" [1]
  • Files check out
  • Portland then had an anti-pinball ordinance that was being contested in court. Do we know the outcome?
I did not write this section, but to me the text implies that pinball was not allowed back then, but is today. I found this, which is heavy on the legal lingo. In my opinion, it is most important to focus attention on how the venue has been mentioned in the press, and less on the legalities of pinball machine in the city or state. That type of info belong on another article, in my opinion. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:07, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Can "pasties" be linked in the lead and body?
Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 22:45, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Can "Oregonian" be linked anywhere?
Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 22:46, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Vicki had managed the business for the twenty-five years leading to her father's death some ambiguity here, I first interpreted the sentence to mean that her managing the club led to her father's death, unless that's what the text means.
I think "leading up to" would be better, but I went ahead and changed the text to: "Vicki had managed the business for the twenty-five years prior to her father's death". --Another Believer (Talk) 22:48, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • such as the Orient what is "the Orient"? can you link?
Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 22:48, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 22:50, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your time and assistance. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:18, 24 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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