Talk:Marvin Williams (footballer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:05, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Will read this article and shall provide my feedback soon. MWright96 (talk) 10:05, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

"A spell at Swedish Third Division club Östersunds FK followed in April 2010, playing seven times before leaving the club in June that year." - team to avoid close reptition of the same word
"and subsequently signed for another Conference South team in the form of Sutton United in October 2012." - better; for fellow Conference South team Sutton United in October 2012.

Millwall

"Williams signed his first professional contract with the club, signing the contract just hours before Millwall's FA Cup tie against Premier League club Everton. - Williams signed his first professional contract with Millwall, just hours before the club's FA Cup tie against Premier League club Everton.
"Williams' goal came in injury-time, a goal which was" - one

Yevoil Club

"Ahead of the 2007–08 season, on 26 July 2007, Williams signed for Yeovil Town of League One for an undisclosed fee, signing a two-year contract with the club." - Williams signed a two-year contact for Yevoil Town of League One for an undisclosed fee.

Brentford

"Williams was placed on the transfer-list by Brentford manager Andy Scott. Scott stated that" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this.
" Williams was placed on the transfer-list by Brentford manager Andy Scott." - also; Williams was transfer listed by Brentford Manager Andy Scott

Return to England

"He became an regular member of Salisbury's playing squad adding another goal" - add a comma between "squad" and "adding"
"in a 2-2 draw" - the hyphen needs to be replaced by an en dash

Style of play

"When Williams signed for Brentford in 2008, manager Andy Scott described Williams as a" - him and remove "a"

References

References 2, 30 are missing the authors of the respective articles
Reference 36 is permantely dead and will need replacing
References 59, 60 and 61 need to be correctly formatted
Reference 62 needs the title of the article and the date it was published

Nice work so far. Not too much to be undertaken in this review. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking the time out to review the article @MWright96: I've made all of the changes you've mentioned. I have also given the career statistics table a refresh. Let me know if there's anything else. Cheers. SBFCEdit (talk) 18:44, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@SBFCEdit: No problem. Have nothing else to raise, so this article can now be promoted to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 20:48, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]