Talk:Mamadou N'Diaye (basketball, born 1993)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Editorofthewiki (talk · contribs) 18:04, 28 April 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I will be reviewing this article. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 18:04, 28 April 2015 (UTC)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is clear and concise, without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Some issues with this article:

• The lead is too short.

  Y Expanded lead.

• The article could use some images, if not of NDiaye then of the UC Irvine coach, UC Irvine campus, etc.

  Y Image of UC Irvine campus added.

• "He encouraged him to travel to the United States, which N'Diaye accepted." This is not grammatical, please reword.

  Y Reworded.

• "A married couple in Huntington Beach, California, near the future high school where he would play basketball, offered to become his guardians to ease his commute for medical treatment." -- this is clunky, please reword

  Y Reworded as well.

• "He was not allowed to play basketball during his first year in the high school because of California Interscholastic Federation rules." -- what rule did he break?

  Y I've added a note explaining why he was not allowed to play in his first year.

• "According to Bahnsen upon arriving at the school, N'Diaye "could barely get up and down the court more than a few times" due to his poor fitness after rehab." -- rehab ->rehabilitation

  Y Done.

• "He also considered Oregon, Georgetown, and Pepperdine, whom he received an offer from as well." I'm assuming he received officers from all three schools.

  Y I decided to remove the "whom he received an offer from" phrase altogether.

• "He also added on with 8 rebounds and 9 blocks." This is not grammatical, please reword.

  Y Reworded.

• Did UC Irvine make the postseason in NDiayes freshman year and how did he perform?

  Y Information added.

• The sophomore and statistics sections need to be updated.

  Y I believe the stats section is up to date, and I added a couple more sentences to the sophomore section. Let me know if it still needs to be expanded.

  it's not entirely up to date, since it says he only played 15 games. Also, the section needs to be expanded more. In addition, the article is contradictory about his height -- is he 7'5 or 7'6? Did he grow in college? ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 21:02, 28 April 2015 (UTC)

  He played a total of 15 games in his sophomore season because of injury (just added this information to the article). I have further expanded the sophomore section, adding info about forgoing the NBA draft. He did grow in college, because the articles about him in high school call him 7'5, while those featuring him at UCI call him 7'6. TempleM (talk) 21:43, 28 April 2015 (UTC)

I am placing this on hold for 7 days until the issues can be resolved. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 18:04, 28 April 2015 (UTC)

Passing. Nice work! ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 22:21, 28 April 2015 (UTC)