Talk:Malta in the Eurovision Song Contest 2016/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:11, 29 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The song was performed by Ira Losco → Only her last name since you've already mentioned her beforehand
through the national final Malta Eurovision Song Contest 2016 → remove italics
determine the song Ira Losco would ultimately perform at the Eurovision Song Contest → only her last name
On 14 March 2016, PBS announced that Ira Losco would perform the song "Walk on Water" → remove "the song"

Infobox

Song Selection → Song selection
17 March 2016 → wasn't it announced that "Walk on Water" would compete as malta's entry on 14 March?

Background

to participate at the 2016 Eurovision Song Contest → the better preposition here is "it"
Nothing else I can complain about here

Before Eurovision

Malta Eurovision Song Contest 2016

as well as online at the broadcaster's website → the better preposition here is "on"
You can add "(NBT)" next to "Bulgarian National Television"
Head of the Delegation → Even if it's written like that in the original source, you don't really need the "the" here
Link "Montenegro at the Eurovision Song Contest" to Montenegro in the Eurovision Song Contest
to assess the quality of the voice of the artist → to assess the quality of their voice
to allow the jury to assess the quality of the voice of the artist → this part isn't backed by the source(?)
as long as the artist(s) were Maltese → you don't need the paranthesis
The entire second paragraph of "Competing entries" isn't backed up by the source
by the local bands The Crowns and The New Victorians → by the local bands the Crowns and the New Victorians
Make sure that the "Result" parameter in the table in "Semi-final" is centered
while the interval act featured further performances by Destiny Chukunyere → only her last name here as yu've already mentioned her above
In "Final", you can link the second paragraph to the first one. I dislike one-line paras, but it's your choice
Make the detailed jury voted table collapsible

Song selection

Following Losco's win at the Malta Eurovision Song Contest 2016, → no need to put the contest's name in italics
Unlink "Chamelon" here
made available online at the broadcaster's website → preposition to use is "on"

Promotion

No need for a second paragraph; just tuck it to the first one
Other than that, great work here

At Eurovision

Start off this section with this sentence: "The Eurovision Song Contest 2016 took place at the X Arena in X, [COUNTRY]."
who announced the top 12-point score awarded → who announced the top 12 points awarded
as having finished in the top 10 and subsequently qualifying for the grand final → "consequently" would fit better here
There is no "Czechia" related to the Eurovision Song Contest, it's "Czech Republic"; please fix that in the tables for the redlinks to disappear

After Eurovision

She spoke of her appreciation that the jury but recognised the closeness of the contest in recent years → The structure of this sentence makes no sense to me
She received praised from her manager Howard Keith Debono → She received praise from her manager Howard Keith Debono

Other things

Copy-violation

37.1% is still a good percentage

References

No dead links! Congrats! You may archive them, though!
As far as I've checked them, the refs do cover the assertions made in this article
"Times of Malta" should be displayed as Times of Malta in the references where it's used, as it's a magazine

Outcome

On hold — Sorry for taking me so long to get to this review! It's a very good article, actually, and only has some minor issues that need to be solved before it's ready for promotion. I give you 7 days for that! Greetings and good luck; Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:20, 30 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Are you finished? I'm a bit confused lol...

Cartoon network freak (talk) 10:54, 1 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Yes. Please do check if there is anything else that needs addressing. MWright96 (talk) 11:20, 1 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Everything has been adressed now, so I'm passing this wonderful article for GA! Congrats ! I also have a GAN in this direction, Romania in the Eurovision Song Contest, and I wondered if you could review it (?). Just disregard if you're too busy... Happy New Year; Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:40, 1 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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