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The album's underlying theme is one of love, and in writing the album, Moa drew the most inspiration from her civil partner, Azaria Universe. -> could read better.
Better?
I know your from New Zealand, but the dates are backwards.
MOS:DATE - either style is acceptable. Since this is about a NZ-origin album, I have used NZ English
Love in Motion saw Moa -> can albums see?
Lol, done
Critical reviews for the album have been mostly positive, and it debuted and peaked on the New Zealand Albums Chart at number four -> doesn't flow. Consider splitting
Done
The lead single from Love in Motion was "Running Through the Fire (Storm)", -> "RTFS" served as the album's lead single, which peaked
shouldn't it be Background and inspiration? You speak about the song's lyrical inspiration, not so much the recording process
Inspiration is part of an album's background
the album.[2][3] The album -> try to mix it up a bit
Done
"In the Air" is about Moa's fear of flying. -> sentencing is a bit awkward. Could be fixed up a bit. Many sentences don't flow and are so short, it reads choppy
Hmm, take a look now?
and the album was recorded in two more weeks -> with the entire recording process being completed in one month; or something like that
That would kind of blur what the source is saying.
and the album was produced by Moa and Andre Upston -> doesn't flow with the beginning of the sentence
should be music and composition, as this section doesn't speak much of the lyrics, as the previous section does
Renamed as 'Composition'
Love in Motion saw -> doesn't make sense
Done
pop rock environment -> environment
Eh?
The sound of -> the sound? or the song?
Rewrote sentence
". -> you have allot these issues
I don't understand. Do you mean I have too many quotes?
Katarina Filipe praised Moa's live performing nature, noting that "the radio and CD versions were nothing compared to her on-stage performance" -> is this a good thing?
Yes, the recorded versions were nothing (ie bad) compared to her live performances (ie really good)
