Talk:Love in Motion (Anika Moa album)/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: --CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 23:16, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• The album's underlying theme is one of love, and in writing the album, Moa drew the most inspiration from her civil partner, Azaria Universe. -> could read better.

• Better?

• I know your from New Zealand, but the dates are backwards.

• MOS:DATE - either style is acceptable. Since this is about a NZ-origin album, I have used NZ English

• Love in Motion saw Moa -> can albums see?

• Lol, done

• Critical reviews for the album have been mostly positive, and it debuted and peaked on the New Zealand Albums Chart at number four -> doesn't flow. Consider splitting

• Done

• The lead single from Love in Motion was "Running Through the Fire (Storm)", -> "RTFS" served as the album's lead single, which peaked

• Done

Background

• shouldn't it be Background and inspiration? You speak about the song's lyrical inspiration, not so much the recording process

• Inspiration is part of an album's background

• the album.[2][3] The album -> try to mix it up a bit

• Done

• "In the Air" is about Moa's fear of flying. -> sentencing is a bit awkward. Could be fixed up a bit. Many sentences don't flow and are so short, it reads choppy

• Hmm, take a look now?

• and the album was recorded in two more weeks -> with the entire recording process being completed in one month; or something like that

• That would kind of blur what the source is saying.

• and the album was produced by Moa and Andre Upston -> doesn't flow with the beginning of the sentence

• Done

Music and lyrics

• should be music and composition, as this section doesn't speak much of the lyrics, as the previous section does

Renamed as 'Composition'

• Love in Motion saw -> doesn't make sense

• Done

• pop rock environment -> environment

• Eh?

• The sound of -> the sound? or the song?

• Rewrote sentence

• ". -> you have allot these issues

• I don't understand. Do you mean I have too many quotes?

• Katarina Filipe praised Moa's live performing nature, noting that "the radio and CD versions were nothing compared to her on-stage performance" -> is this a good thing?

• Yes, the recorded versions were nothing (ie bad) compared to her live performances (ie really good)

Singles

• It has not appeared on any singles chart, however. -> it didn't; also try combining it with another sentence.

Charts

• You should create a peaking chart as well as certifications wherever applicable.

• Why? It has only appeared on one chart.

References

• Would be better is dates were year-month-day format, like this 2010-11-30.

• Date stylings are optional, and I have noticed that ISO dates are becoming less common on WP

• • That's all for now Adabow. Ping me when your done :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:39, 1 December 2010 (UTC)

• • • Looks fine now. I'm passing.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 16:20, 1 December 2010 (UTC)