Talk:Liverpool Women's Suffrage Society/GA1
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 20:48, 23 June 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]- All great!
Lead
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[edit]- "It held meetings in cafes..." --> "It held meetings in cafés..."
- "It held meetings in cafés which included talks, poetry and dance recitals and recruited..." --> Back–to–back use of "and"; please reword
Paragraph 2
[edit]- Great!
History
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[edit]- Please add an additional space in between "The society set up headquarters at 6 Lord Street.[4]" and "Millicent Fawcett, leader of the National Union of Women's Suffrage Societies, attended the first meeting as a guest speaker.[5][6]"
Paragraph 2
[edit]- "The society recruited more prestigious members of society,[8] leading to other disenfranchised women (especially those from the working-class) joining the WSPU[9][10] and actively distanced itself from WSPU protests.[11]" --> "The society recruited more prestigious members of society,[8] leading to other disenfranchised women (especially those from the working-class) joining the WSPU;[9][10] the organization also actively distanced itself from WSPU protests.[11]"
- Rest is great; fantastic work!
Goals
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[edit]- Does the Helmond source state "Yamen Cafe" or "Yamen Café"?
Founders
[edit]- Nothing! Great work!
Liverpool Women's Citizen Association
[edit]- Just a suggestion, not necessarily a demand:
- "In 1911, sensing they were close to achieving suffrage, Rathbone & Stewart-Bright created Municipal Women's Association as a branch of the society. Its aim was to increase awareness of the vote for women, encourage discussion amongst potential women voters and teaching women what to do when they had the vote.[27]" --> "In 1911, sensing they were close to achieving suffrage, Rathbone & Stewart-Bright created Municipal Women's Association as a branch of the society; its aim was to increase awareness of the vote for women, encourage discussion amongst potential women voters and teaching women what to do when they had the vote.[27]"
Other notes
[edit]- Just a side note, but I recently presented a topic regarding this to my World History class a few weeks ago so I was glad I was able to review this particular article!! Carbrera (talk) 21:40, 23 June 2016 (UTC)
End of GA Review:
[edit]A great article Stacey! Just a few changes before passing! On hold for seven days to allow for these changes; please contact me if you need anything further–I'd be glad to help you out! Thanks! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 21:40, 23 June 2016 (UTC).
- Thank you so much! Just thought I'd mention although I did lots of the research it was my beloved User:Worm That Turned that wrote it. He's now fixed everything I think! ツStacey (talk) 12:54, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
- Ha. Ha. :P Thanks Carbrera for reviewing the article. The source calls it the Yamen Cafe, so I've left it at that, but I think we've made all the other changes. Let me know if you spot anything else, and thanks again for taking the time to read over it! WormTT(talk) 12:56, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks! Will be passing it now! Congrats! Carbrera (talk) 17:31, 24 June 2016 (UTC).
- Ha. Ha. :P Thanks Carbrera for reviewing the article. The source calls it the Yamen Cafe, so I've left it at that, but I think we've made all the other changes. Let me know if you spot anything else, and thanks again for taking the time to read over it! WormTT(talk) 12:56, 24 June 2016 (UTC)