Talk:Lithium (Evanescence song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ribbet32 (talk · contribs) 21:43, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Well-written:

1a Lede: "sees writing credits"- is this really the right wording, as opposed to something like "carries writing credits"? "US" should be U.S. per WP:NOTUSA. "at a snowy forest" should be "in". Last para of Commercial performance goes from Europe to Europe- the latter should be "continental Europe" in contrast to UK and Ireland. 1b WP:WORDSTOWATCH "noted" in Critical reception. Suggest the top 10 sentences at the end of this section be its own para rather than lumped with the mixed reviews.

Verifiable with no original research

2a Thoroughly referenced 2b generally fine sources. 2c. Per WP:BLP, please place citations immediately after statements such as the group suing the manager and Balsamo having a stroke. Reference for quote "which embraces feeling over numbness"? Reference for quote "metaphor for happiness from a negative point of view"? Reference for quote "It's looking at it like, 'I don't want to numb myself and not feel anymore'"? Citation for "Initially, Lee was indecisive as to which song to choose as the second single from The Open Door, having in mind four different album tracks"? [1] doesn't put Lithium at #32. Citation for "premiered exclusively to Canadian audiences on MuchMusic.com on November 24, 2006"? Don't see Evanescence here [2] This [3] doesn't include number 44. 2d. Copyright and close paraphrasing concerns:

"between the comfort of sorrow and the idea of happiness":"guitarist Ben Moody left the band"

"constant cycles of being trapped in bad life situations and relationships"

Broad in its coverage:

3a. This is my first time I've reviewed a song article, but it covers the bases of other song GAs; I love Evanescense and this covers what I knew about the song. 3b. Not a lot off topic

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.

4. No concerns

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

5. No edit wars taking place

Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio

6. Photo is attributed.

I think I have addressed everything. My love is love 22:35, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for your quick response @My love is love:, but I wouldn't say "noticed" is much more neutral than noted. I also see in some cases you spell out numbers higher than 10 but sometimes you don't. Any logic as to why? Also, can you explain where the Bottomley VH1 reference backs the quotes it's being used to support? Ribbet32 (talk) 00:25, 2 September 2017 (UTC)

I've replaced the word with "observed", spelled out all numbers and fixed the references. My love is love 13:40, 2 September 2017 (UTC)

Thank you @My love is love:, can you point out where the Dale Kawashima reference includes the quotes I've left uncrossed out? Also, numbers should still be consistent, note the advice User:Huntster gave. Ribbet32 (talk) 16:44, 2 September 2017 (UTC)

@Ribbet32:  Done now. My love is love 16:53, 2 September 2017 (UTC)

OK @My love is love:, take care of the missing reference for the stroke and archive the Commercial section 32 reference [4] and this can be wrapped up. Ribbet32 (talk) 17:15, 2 September 2017 (UTC)  Done