Talk:Lighters (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 21:45, 31 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Sorry for the delay; will get to it this weekend. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:08, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Take your time, no rushes its quite a big article. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:50, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Personally, I believe this article passes all the criteria of a Good Article. I hope that if there is any error surrounding this review I can be contacted. Many thanks. ThomDevexx ॐ (talk) 12:33, 11 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@HeyJude70: What do you mean with the second sentence? Cheers, MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:48, 12 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Sorry mate, I worded that terribly. I simply meant to offer any assistance if needed. I apologise for the confusion. ThomDevexx ॐ (talk) 08:51, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@HeyJude70: First of all, thank you and no harm done whatsoever. I will ping you if assistance needed, but feel free to see the modifications and if they are making sense.MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:24, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

is a song by the American → Remove "the"
from their first → for their first
Ari Levine of The Smeezingtons, and by Roy Battle → Remove "by"
The production was handled by all of them, but Royce → The production was handled by all aforementioned names, except Royce.
It first surfaced online on June 2, 2011, before being officially released on June 20, 2011 on a promotional CD single and later on July 4, 2011, the radio cut was issued also in the same format by Shady Records and Interscope Records. A day later, the song was serviced to mainstream radio airplay in the United States by the two latter labels along with Aftermath Entertainment as the second single from the EP. → Too detailed for lead section;please state "It was released on June 14, 2011 by Shady and Interscope Records, being later serviced to mainstream radio airplay in the United States by the two latter labels along with Aftermath Entertainment as the second single from the EP."
Los Angeles. The singer's vocals were added → Los Angeles, and the singer's vocals were added
after minor adjustments by him → after minor adjustments were done by him
soul music and synthpop → soul and synthpop music
for being different in style from other tracks on the → for being musically different among other tracks on
top ten of several countries, being kept from the top spot in New Zealand, a number four peak in Canada and on the United States Hot 100 and a top ten peak in Switzerland and in the United Kingdom. → top ten of several countries, including number two in New Zealand, number four in Canada and the United States, and number ten in Switzerland and the United Kingdom.
platinum → Platinum
and once by → and Platinum by the
on July, 2011 → in July 2011
It portrays the two rappers in character. Royce is in a prison cell until he finds a way to evade through a door compartment, while Eminem discovers a trap door on the floor of a living room and climbs down a ladder. Finally, Mars is singing while playing an upright piano during the entire video. Both rappers guide themselves through an underground tunnel system by using red highway flares to reach an event by night, where a large group of rising sky lanterns aglow are seen by them and couples. → too detailed for the lead; write: "It features both Royce and Eminem in a prison cells, with both finding a way to escape by discovering a way through a door compartment and a trap door on the floor of a living room, respectively. Througjout the entire visual, Mars is singing while playing an upright piano."
performed at the some music festivals → at several music festivals
International Video of the Year - Group → use "–"

Done except for the second change, the sentence makes no sense if I make that amendment. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:44, 14 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Alternative text for cover artwork

Done

Background and production

Royce da 5'9" spoke to Canadian music magazine Exclaim! about the origins of Bad Meets Evil's collaboration with singer-songwriter Bruno Mars. Originally, "Lighters" was intended to be featured → When speaking to Candain music magazine [...] , Royce da 5'9" confessed that "Lighters" was originally [...]
It was produced solely → It was solely
NY producer → remove please as it's overfluous
After Royce presenting → After Royce presented
to write his the day → to write his verse the day
The latter along with Eminem made → Along with Eminem, the latter made
Mars' vocals were added → for better flow: Subsequently, Mars' vocals were added
were added after the original cut → you mean that they were added "on the original cut"?
The song was written by → use "single" here for alternation
The Smeezingtons a production → Like them here + comma after "Smeezingtons"
all of whom (save for Royce) also → all of whom, except Royce, also
Battle Roy along with Joe Strange engineered → comma before "along" and after "Strange"
Detroit producer Luis Resto → Remove "Detroit producer"
who did so for six other → who also did for six other
was revealed to the public → was publicly revealed to

Done I made minor changes in some stuff for better flow, some stuff made no sense at all. Yes that's what I meant. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:15, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyricsm

Change name of subtopic to "Composition and lyrical interpretation"
Audio sample > and be one of the best rappers → and being one of the best rappers
It has also been recognized as a blend of rap/hip-hop with pop with parts of a synth ballad → It has also been described asa blend of rap/hip-hop and pop, further incorporating parts of a synth ballad.
Mars' sings with his → Mars sings with his
tenor tone, on top of a pop → no comma here
his verse, saying → no comma here
and he is followed by Royce → being followed by Royce
edit last 4 minutes 23 seconds → edit lasts four minutes and 23 seconds.
which also features Mars and "Lighters", regarding their composition → remove as it's overfluous and makes less sense
Lyrically, the record → Lyrically, the recording (record is used for albums)
genuine supporting and celebrate → genuine supporting and celebration
Eminem, during his verses, → During his verses, Eminem refers
and is recovery → and his recovery
they (Eminem and Royce) wanted → he and Eminem wanted

Done

Critical reception and accolades

Image > Mars appearance on the track was complemented, due to his performance on the chorus. → Mars' (pictured) appearance and vocal delivery on the song's chorus was complemented by music critics.
Hell: The Sequel,[10][7][18] → refs in numerical order
Both Idolator's reviewer, Becky Bain, and Rob Markman from MTV News → no commas here at all
to hear Eminem's performance. "It's hard to imagine → to hear Eminem's performance, "It's...
5'9"'s verse; "The gritty → normal comma here
soulful pop hip hop blend," by → comma after "
The record's chorus → The recording's chorus
but alone, is a good song: "[The] track → : to ,
the duo's lyricism: "These two Detroit rappers → : to ,
analyze Royce's verse: "Toss → : to ,
various elements of the record → ... recording
and awarded it a B- → ... B–
the song a harsh critic calling it → comma before "calling"
was embracing calling → comma before "calling"
Dorof continued "It’s touching → comma after "continued"
Robbins believes that the chorus, by Mars, does not fit → Robbins believes that Mars' vocal delivery in the chorus does not fit
only disappointing record → only disappointing recording
on the EP (Deluxe Edition) → on the EP's deluxe edition
Connect last para with the last but one para

Done

Commercial performance

dropped on the Hot 100, to number 36 → no comma here
The record further moved up → The recording...
number 17 on the Hot 100, on the subsequent week and to number 10, the week after → no commas here
top-ten hit → top ten hit
The song, eventually, reached → no commas here
and has was on the chart for 20 weeks,[35] the record topped the → and was on the chart for 20 weeks,[35] with it further topping the
As of September, 2012 → no comma here
copies in the US → ...United States
platinum → Platinum
On the issue date of September 10, 2011 → on the issue dated September 10, 2011
entered at number 25, in the beginning of July, 2011 → no commas here
didn't enter France's singles chart → did not enter France's single chart
11 by September 24, 2011 → "by" to "on"
at number 37, on June 25 → no comma here
It rose to number 30, the week after, but left the UK chart, six weeks later → first comma not needed + write "UK" out here
On August 6, 2011 the track peaked at number 13 on its fourth week into Dutch Top 40 → On August 6, 2011, the track peaked at number 13 in its fourth week on the Dutch Top 40
On the, VG-lista, Norwegian record chart → On Norway's VG-lista,
its peak of number nine by its third week → "by" to "in"
Fifteen weeks into the Scottish chart, the single reached its peak of number nine → In Scotland, "Lighters" peaked at number nine and spent fifteen weeks on that country's respective chart.
rose to number 19, the following week → no comma here
July, 2011 → no comma here
platinum → Platinum
gold → Gold
The song sold 445,708 copies → use "It" here for alternation

Done gold and platinum shouldn't be changed for capital letters, none of the FA articles I have seen have it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:09, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

Image > system tunnel, illuminated by red highway flares → no comma here
The music video for "Lighters" began filming on July 20, 2011 in → Filming sessions for an accompanying music video for "Lighters" began on July 20, 2011
Los Angeles, California → unlink as aforementioned already
previously shot the "Not Afraid" music video → use "visual" here for alternation
Not revealing any specific details about the music video → state "clip" here for alternation
he jokingly added "I'm doing → comma after "added"
He also promised that it would be released "very soon" → please remove this as it's not important at all
was uploaded to music video website → remove "music video website" here
I've edited "Synopsis" by myself
James Montgomery, from MTV News, → remove both commas
wrote: "It's a stirring image → : to ,
Unlink "Consequence of Sound"
Unlink "Idolator", as well
International Video of the Year - Group → - to –

Done. Nevermind I got it.

Live performances

Unlink "Royce da 5'9"" here
Edited the rest by myslef as it's more comfortable

Done Thank you very much.

Track listings

For the second "Promo CD single" instance, state "Promo CD 2"

Done

Credits and personnel

Credits were adapted from the Hell: The Sequel digital booklet, Shady Records and Interscope Records → Credits adapted from the liner notes of Hell: The Sequel.

Done

Charts and certifications

flawless ;)

Release

Shady Records and Interscope Records → Unlink as aforementioned
CD Single → CD single
Aftermath Entertainment → unlink labels

Done

Other stuff

Copy-violation

24.2% is acceptable! Congrats!

Images and others

Article is perfectly illustrated by images!
Audio sample seems stable, as well ;)

Links

No problems here!

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article!
2 dead links! Please fix this issue!!

Done. I will eventually archive every link.

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! Great article and an interesting reading, but it needs further work to be passed to GA status. Good luck with editing and best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:40, 14 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Every issue has been addressed, I left some comments please read them. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:51, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

- Gladly passing! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:00, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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