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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Haven't reviewed one of yours for a while; will take this on! --K. Peake 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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 Done
  • "a guest appearance from" → "a guest appearance by"
 Done
  • Mention that it was released as a standalone single
 Done
  • "It is a house track. The song's lyrics are" → "A house track, its lyrics are"
 Done
  • Mention that it was dubbed as mentioned by Promonews
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  • "and it also reached the" → "and also reached the"
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  • "stars Nathan Dawe and KSI" → "stars Dawe and KSI"
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  • "starting out completely" → "though they start out completely"
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  • "both sports, but improving as" → "both sports but improve as"
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  • Mention the Top of the Pops performance as that special is notable for the lead
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Writing and production

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  • "wrote and recorded the song" → "wrote and recorded "Lighter""
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  • The other collaborators mentioned in this sentence are not referenced by the source
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  • "at the time."" → "at the time"."
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  • "She had a" → Dawe recalled: "She had a"
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  • "They sent the song to" → "She sent the song to"
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  • Remove introduction to who Dawe is since we have already done this in the lead
 Done
  • "wished him luck" → "wished [him] luck" because the quote does not say that
 Done
 Done
  • Remove the commas around "Flowers" and add the release year in brackets
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  • "which featured British rapper" → "which features British rapper"
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  • Remove introduction to who KSI is per my earlier comment, but keep the target
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  • "He explained, "It took me" → "He explained that "it took [him]"
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  • "write the verse."" → "write the verse"." per MOS:QUOTE
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  • Remove target on fan base
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  • "feel-good vibe"." → "feel-good vibe.""
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Music and lyrics

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  • Remove target on rap since the term does not always refer to hip hop
 Done
  • Further information can be added to this section from 5, 6 and 16
 Done
  • The second sentence is unsourced
 Done

Release and promotion

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  • Remove target on single
 Done
  • "and the song was" → "and "Lighter" was"
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  • No source is added for the digital download and streaming release
 Not done use a ref name from the release history table --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why are the Atlantic and Warner labels listed differently in the body than in the infobox and lead?
 Done
 Done
  • Move the other live performances to being after this one in the same para
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  • Remove "on 28 August" since we can tell that's the release date
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This version credits" → "The version credits"
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  • Remove "instead of his verse..." because the brand new part is too similar to that
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  • "for the acoustic version of the song" → "for the acoustic version"
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  • "which features new verses" → "that features new verses"
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  • "on 21 September 2020. A remix by" → "on 21 September, while one by"
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 Partly done you missed the removal of the year --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception, as this will be more than reviews
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  • Mention that it was dubbed as such by the staff of Promonews
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  • Sure you can't add any more reviews; this is awfully short right now?
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  • Remove wikilink on piano
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  • Add the accolade as a separate para here to split from reviews
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 Partly done you forgot to place in a separate para --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

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  • "The music video was" → "The video was"
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  • "The group challenge each other to" → "KSI challenges his fellow group members to"
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  • Remove wikilink on basketball
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  • Remove target on football
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done
  • "on 14 August 2020." → "one week later."
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

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  • Italicise Promonews
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Commercial performance

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  • "both artists' first song" → "both Dawe and KSI's first song"
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  • "The song spent a total" → "It lasted for a total"
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  • Remove the 26 weeks part since that is not sourced
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "40th-highest-selling and the 32nd-most-downloaded" → "40th highest-selling and 32nd most-downloaded"
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  • Only [29] is needed at the end of the sentence
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  • "The song also debuted" → "The song further debuted"
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Live performances

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  • Since the number of performances here is only two, move to release and promotion like what I said earlier
 Done

Accolades

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  • Write one in prose since this is only one award; hence the move to reception because a section is not needed
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Credits and personnel

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  • Change KSI's vocals to featured artist, plus swap with songwriter in the order and he should be after Tre Jean-Marie
  • Ella Henderson should be one below KSI and swap vocals with songwriter in the order
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 Partly done you should follow songwriter with vocals in the personnel's respective credits --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

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Weekly charts

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 Done
 Not done see MOS:LINK2SECT --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Year-end charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

Release history

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  • Again, which version of the labels listed is correct?
 Done

See also

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks pretty good at 25.4%; ignore the flagged URL because that is not cited anywhere here
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
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  • Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead for refs 1, 27 and 36
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  • Cite Capital FM as publisher instead for ref 4
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  • Cite last name followed by first for Nathan Dawe on refs 7, 8, 11, 12 and 19
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  • Do this for ref 9 as well but fix MOS:CAPS issues too
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  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 14 and cite GRM Daily as publisher instead
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  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 18
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  • Cite Tidal as publisher instead for ref 38
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  • Cite Ultratop as publisher instead for ref 39
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 Done
  • Cite Apple Music as publisher instead for refs 50, 52, 53, 54 and 55, plus remove Spotify since it is unreliable and replace with other AM citations
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • WP:OVERLINK of Capital FM on ref 51
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  •  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; your writing skills are improving but I have noticed throughout these reviews that you do not add enough info to comp. --K. Peake 17:46, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Timwikisidemen You have still not removed the introductions to who KSI and Dawe are in the opening section, nor have you added "Dawe recalled" in the area I suggested or removed the verse-chorus form unsourced sentence. These are changes I have already noticed you've missed; fix these and check through to make sure you haven't forgotten even more. --K. Peake 07:52, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Timwikisidemen I had a look through and planked the respective partly and not done templates on anywhere changes are still required. --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Timwikisidemen Thank you for all of the fixes you have made, I advise to look through all of the suggested changes more than once in the future to check you have definitely done them. ✓ Pass, but I did copy edit slightly where some issues remain! --K. Peake 20:44, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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