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Good articleLighter (Nathan Dawe song) has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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January 28, 2021Good article nomineeListed

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Haven't reviewed one of yours for a while; will take this on! --K. Peake 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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 Done
  • "a guest appearance from" → "a guest appearance by"
 Done
  • Mention that it was released as a standalone single
 Done
  • "It is a house track. The song's lyrics are" → "A house track, its lyrics are"
 Done
  • Mention that it was dubbed as mentioned by Promonews
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  • "and it also reached the" → "and also reached the"
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  • "stars Nathan Dawe and KSI" → "stars Dawe and KSI"
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  • "starting out completely" → "though they start out completely"
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  • "both sports, but improving as" → "both sports but improve as"
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  • Mention the Top of the Pops performance as that special is notable for the lead
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Writing and production

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  • "wrote and recorded the song" → "wrote and recorded "Lighter""
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  • The other collaborators mentioned in this sentence are not referenced by the source
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  • "at the time."" → "at the time"."
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  • "She had a" → Dawe recalled: "She had a"
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  • "They sent the song to" → "She sent the song to"
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  • Remove introduction to who Dawe is since we have already done this in the lead
 Done
  • "wished him luck" → "wished [him] luck" because the quote does not say that
 Done
 Done
  • Remove the commas around "Flowers" and add the release year in brackets
 Done
  • "which featured British rapper" → "which features British rapper"
 Done
  • Remove introduction to who KSI is per my earlier comment, but keep the target
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  • "He explained, "It took me" → "He explained that "it took [him]"
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  • "write the verse."" → "write the verse"." per MOS:QUOTE
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  • Remove target on fan base
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  • "feel-good vibe"." → "feel-good vibe.""
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Music and lyrics

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  • Remove target on rap since the term does not always refer to hip hop
 Done
  • Further information can be added to this section from 5, 6 and 16
 Done
  • The second sentence is unsourced
 Done

Release and promotion

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  • Remove target on single
 Done
  • "and the song was" → "and "Lighter" was"
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  • No source is added for the digital download and streaming release
 Not done use a ref name from the release history table --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why are the Atlantic and Warner labels listed differently in the body than in the infobox and lead?
 Done
 Done
  • Move the other live performances to being after this one in the same para
 Done
 Done
  • Remove "on 28 August" since we can tell that's the release date
 Done
 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This version credits" → "The version credits"
 Done
  • Remove "instead of his verse..." because the brand new part is too similar to that
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  • "for the acoustic version of the song" → "for the acoustic version"
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  • "which features new verses" → "that features new verses"
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  • "on 21 September 2020. A remix by" → "on 21 September, while one by"
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 Partly done you missed the removal of the year --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception, as this will be more than reviews
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  • Mention that it was dubbed as such by the staff of Promonews
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  • Sure you can't add any more reviews; this is awfully short right now?
 Done
  • Remove wikilink on piano
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  • Add the accolade as a separate para here to split from reviews
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 Partly done you forgot to place in a separate para --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

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  • "The music video was" → "The video was"
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  • "The group challenge each other to" → "KSI challenges his fellow group members to"
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  • Remove wikilink on basketball
 Done
  • Remove target on football
 Done
 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
 Done
  • "on 14 August 2020." → "one week later."
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

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  • Italicise Promonews
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Commercial performance

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  • "both artists' first song" → "both Dawe and KSI's first song"
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  • "The song spent a total" → "It lasted for a total"
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  • Remove the 26 weeks part since that is not sourced
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 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "40th-highest-selling and the 32nd-most-downloaded" → "40th highest-selling and 32nd most-downloaded"
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  • Only [29] is needed at the end of the sentence
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  • "The song also debuted" → "The song further debuted"
 Done

Live performances

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  • Since the number of performances here is only two, move to release and promotion like what I said earlier
 Done

Accolades

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  • Write one in prose since this is only one award; hence the move to reception because a section is not needed
 Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Change KSI's vocals to featured artist, plus swap with songwriter in the order and he should be after Tre Jean-Marie
  • Ella Henderson should be one below KSI and swap vocals with songwriter in the order
 Done
 Partly done you should follow songwriter with vocals in the personnel's respective credits --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

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Weekly charts

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 Done
 Not done see MOS:LINK2SECT --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Year-end charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

Release history

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  • Again, which version of the labels listed is correct?
 Done

See also

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks pretty good at 25.4%; ignore the flagged URL because that is not cited anywhere here
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
 Done
  • Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead for refs 1, 27 and 36
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 Done
  • Cite Capital FM as publisher instead for ref 4
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  • Cite last name followed by first for Nathan Dawe on refs 7, 8, 11, 12 and 19
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  • Do this for ref 9 as well but fix MOS:CAPS issues too
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  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 14 and cite GRM Daily as publisher instead
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  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 18
 Done
  • Cite Tidal as publisher instead for ref 38
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  • Cite Ultratop as publisher instead for ref 39
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 Done
  • Cite Apple Music as publisher instead for refs 50, 52, 53, 54 and 55, plus remove Spotify since it is unreliable and replace with other AM citations
 Done
 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • WP:OVERLINK of Capital FM on ref 51
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  •  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; your writing skills are improving but I have noticed throughout these reviews that you do not add enough info to comp. --K. Peake 17:46, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Timwikisidemen You have still not removed the introductions to who KSI and Dawe are in the opening section, nor have you added "Dawe recalled" in the area I suggested or removed the verse-chorus form unsourced sentence. These are changes I have already noticed you've missed; fix these and check through to make sure you haven't forgotten even more. --K. Peake 07:52, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Timwikisidemen I had a look through and planked the respective partly and not done templates on anywhere changes are still required. --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Timwikisidemen Thank you for all of the fixes you have made, I advise to look through all of the suggested changes more than once in the future to check you have definitely done them. ✓ Pass, but I did copy edit slightly where some issues remain! --K. Peake 20:44, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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