Talk:Lichfield/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk · contribs) 22:02, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

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Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 22:06, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I aim to post a review within 48 hours or so, Jezhotwells (talk) 22:06, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
At Wall, 3.5 km (2.2 mi) to the south of the present city, Why is "Wall" italicised? It could be wikinked to Wall, Staffordshire.

The earliest evidence of settlement has been the discovery of Mesolithic flints "has been"?

At the time of the Domesday survey, Lichfield was held by the bishop of Chester, where the see of the bishopric had been moved 10 years earlier; Lichfield was listed as a small village This would be better earlier as Domesday was in 1086.

Bishop Clinton was responsible for transforming the scattered settlements to the south of Minster Pool into the ladder plan streets we recognise today. "we recognise today" is a little too informal.

Market Street, Wade Street, Bore Street and Frog Lane linked Dam Street, Conduit Street and Bakers Lane on one side with Bird Street and St John Street on the other. a map or plan would be good here, as it stands a little confusing.

Henry VIII had a dramatic effect on Lichfield. looks like commentary, assumes reader knowledge of his policies.

The Reformation brought the disappearance of pilgrim traffic following the destruction of St Chad's shrine in 1538 which was a major loss to the city's economic prosperity. Would be better re-written for clarity.

Three people were burned at the stake for heresy under Mary I. The last person in England to meet this fate was in Lichfield. Edward Wightman from Burton upon Trent was executed by burning in the Market Place on 11 April 1612 for his activities promoting himself as the divine Paraclete and Savior of the world 1612 was well after Mary's time.

The cathedral authorities, with a certain following, "certain following"?

The close yielded and was retaken by Prince Rupert of the Rhine in this year; Two distinct events here: Tghe close yielded to Parliamentary forces and then was retaken by the Royalists.

It was subsequently restored at the end of the Commonwealth period under the supervision of Bishop Hacket, and thanks in part to the generosity of King Charles II. Surely after the Commonwealth?

n the 18th century and reaching its peak in the period from 1800—1840, Again confusing - the dates mentioned are in the 19th century.

with the red brick Georgian style buildings we see today. Again "we see today" is a little too informal.

After the war the council built many new houses in the 1960s including some high-rise flats, the late 70s and early 80s brought a large housing estate at Boley Park in the east of the city. Poor sentence with no definite subject.

In July 2009, The Staffordshire Hoard, the largest collection of Anglo-Saxon gold ever found, was discovered in a field in the parish of Hammerwich, 4 miles (6.4 km) south west of Lichfield. This would better off in the Middle Ages section.

It was not until 1548 with Edward VI's charter that Lichfield had anything like a secular government Poorly phrased.

The City Council has 28 members from the 6 wards of Boley Park, Chadsmead, Curborough, Leamonsley, St Johns and Stowe, who are elected every four years. Needs rephrasing for clarity - as it stands the implication is that the six wards are elected every four years.

OK, I am going to stop the read through here. This article is not "reasonably well written". Please get it thoroughly copy-edited, line by line.

Suburbs: Boley Park | Chadsmead | Christ Church | Darwin Park | The Dimbles | Leamonsley | Nether Stowe | Sandfields | Stowe This is effectively a list - is it necessary.

Places of interest is a list. Better to write in prose, see WP:EMBED. Again Notable Lichfeldians, Education and Twinning.

The lead does not fully summarise the article, see WP:LEAD.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Many statements and indeed whole sections are completely uncited. Those sources used appear to be RS. Formatting of citations are inconsistent, with many having no publisher details. Not all books have page numbers.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
The centre of the city retains an unspoilt charm with over 230 listed buildings in its historic streets, fine Georgian architecture and old cultural traditions. This is not NPOV. The whole article appears to be written in a travel guide style.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
Appears to be stable
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Licensed and tagged with captions. I feel there are a few too may images. Two are used twice, in the collage and in the body
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
This article is a log way from GA status. The whole needs a thorough copy-edit and citations need to be provided in many sections. The tone is not very encyclopaedic in places. I recommend addressing the problems and taking it to peer review before renominating. Jezhotwells (talk) 17:47, 22 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]