Talk:Leaving Through the Window/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 16:43, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Fine

Lead

Audioboxer EP → year of release
Drive-Thru's distributor → their label distributor
Warped Tour → years the tour ran in between brackets
Billboard 200 → Billboard 200
with comments on its length and frontman Andrew McMahon's vocals. → negative, positive comments? Needs to be more specific
Since it is mixed reviews, add something positive as well.

Background

You C Jordan".[11] later that month. → remove the first full stop
"Throughout November, the group toured the California coast, the Midwest and southern states of the US with Reel Big Fish, Sugarcult, Lucky Boys Confusion, River City High, and Riddlin' Kids.[15] Touring continued into December, with the group visiting the east coast." → how is this relevant?

To give context to what the band was doing in the timespan between the release of the Audioboxer EP and recording for Leaving. I shortened it but I wouldn't object to removing it entirely if you'd prefer? Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:09, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Production

The first paragraph lacks a source in the end
Any informating regarding the studio where it was mixed?

Not mentioned in the liner notes. Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

with which to expand song structures → to expand song structures
"I Want to Save You".is → remove full stop
It and "If I Were a Terrorist, → are you refering to "If You C Jordan" or is missing a track here?

Release

Warped Tour → years in between brackets the tour ran
Where was "If You C Jordan" released?

I think the UK, to coincide with the UK tour earlier that month, but the source doesn't say. Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

Remove the first metion of source "25", the latter wil be more than enough
Same for "ChartAttack"
You go back and forth with the positive and negative reviews. It is usually done with postive, mixed and negative
In the beggining of the reviews, before AllMusic, needs a sentence summing up the revies. Such as "Leaving Through the Window received mixed response from music critics." → link music critics to music journalism

Track listing

Fine

Personnel

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between the Personnel and the credits.

Charts

Fine

References

All Music, Buzz Feed, MTV and Punknews.org are publisher, not work
Violation from a site that copied wiki, so it's fine.

Overall

There is one source here that could be used to improve the article. Why wasn't used?
You can now address the issues. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:26, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Yeepsi: I left you a comment in the lead, it will be promoted aftewards.

Added! Yeepsi (talk) 18:12, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]