Talk:Lavender Town/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 16:56, 6 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 18:08, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General

Infobox

In the games

To my best recollection you can catch Cubone in some versions in Lavender? If so, you should mention that.
First sentence reads a little awkwardly with the two ands
I think it might be a good idea to attach more citations to verify that Lavender deviates from RBY's tone, one source feels insufficient, especially TheGamer (not a bad source ofc, but it's not quite as strong to hold up the claim)
I'd suggest moving up the concept of being the first encounter with Pokémon death up near the discussion of the graveyard
Should rename the section since it goes beyond the games

Music

Was it also remixed for Pokémon Go Halloween events? If so, could just turn that into one sentence to say that it was remixed for LGPE and PG.
Section starts with 'It' three times in a row

Lavender Town Syndrome Creepypastas

Should all the words in the header be capitalized?
"the corruption of this childhood aspect is used in order to convey an element of horror in the story. " This should clarify that it's coming from the author, as it feels as though the article is supporting an angle.
"The various creepypastas' attempt to rationalize" This sentence reads a little awkwardly, to use "cited" implies that what they are citing is an accepted truth of the location.

Reception

I question whether the commentary by critics on Lavender Town Syndrome and the music should be apart from the Reception section

Images

Screenshot should have the source be the page it's on instead of just the image itself to show how it's used on that page
Should replace the n.a.s

Spotcheck

Should cite it being a village in the initial sentence using the Guardian citation

@Cukie Gherkin: fixed the above. Could you clarify the bit on Reception? I'm admittedly not sure what you want me to do. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 21:21, 25 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]