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Nominator: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 16:56, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 18:08, 24 October 2024 (UTC)
General
- Make "Ghost-Type" vs. "Ghost-type" consisent
Infobox
- "Home of Spirits" is unverified and otherwise unmentioned
In the games
- To my best recollection you can catch Cubone in some versions in Lavender? If so, you should mention that.
- First sentence reads a little awkwardly with the two ands
- I think it might be a good idea to attach more citations to verify that Lavender deviates from RBY's tone, one source feels insufficient, especially TheGamer (not a bad source ofc, but it's not quite as strong to hold up the claim)
- I'd suggest moving up the concept of being the first encounter with Pokémon death up near the discussion of the graveyard
- Should rename the section since it goes beyond the games
Music
- Was it also remixed for Pokémon Go Halloween events? If so, could just turn that into one sentence to say that it was remixed for LGPE and PG.
- Section starts with 'It' three times in a row
Lavender Town Syndrome Creepypastas
- Should all the words in the header be capitalized?
- "the corruption of this childhood aspect is used in order to convey an element of horror in the story. " This should clarify that it's coming from the author, as it feels as though the article is supporting an angle.
- "The various creepypastas' attempt to rationalize" This sentence reads a little awkwardly, to use "cited" implies that what they are citing is an accepted truth of the location.
Reception
- I question whether the commentary by critics on Lavender Town Syndrome and the music should be apart from the Reception section
Images
- Screenshot should have the source be the page it's on instead of just the image itself to show how it's used on that page
- Should replace the n.a.s
Spotcheck
- Should cite it being a village in the initial sentence using the Guardian citation
@Cukie Gherkin: fixed the above. Could you clarify the bit on Reception? I'm admittedly not sure what you want me to do. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 21:21, 25 October 2024 (UTC)