Talk:Lara Croft Go/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:44, 18 December 2015 (UTC)

I've never heard of this one before... JAGUAR  16:44, 18 December 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

• "as a successor to its popular Hitman Go" - would spiritual successor sound more appropriate?
• "The game was released by Square Enix in August 2015 for Android, iOS, Windows, and Windows Phone" - might be worth adding devices at the end
• "but criticized its short length and disputed its level of difficulty" - 'disputed' sounds confusing here if it's not being read out as and its disputed level of difficulty. Maybe and were divided over its level of difficulty sounds better?
• "Its core gameplay and control scheme is similar to its predecessor, Hitman Go" - again, is Hitman Go considered its predecessor if it's not in the Tomb Raider franchise?
• "Using touchscreen controls, during a turn the player swipes along a line in the direction they want Lara Croft to move" - sentence structure might be better rearranged as Using touchscreen controls, the player swipes along a line in the direction they want Lara Croft to move, during a turn. Feel free to ignore this suggestion
• "The game features in-app purchases, which provide hints to the puzzles" - I'd recommend merging this into a paragraph
• "Still, the team felt that the product distilled the franchise's elements to its simplest form" - I think 'still' sounds informal
• "The team chose the classic Tomb Raider aesthetics over that of the series reboot, but reconstructed their memory of the series aesthetic" - repetition of aesthetic (I understand that esthetic is Canadian spelling)
• Why is IGN italicized?
• Minor, but I'd split the references into two columns
• No gameplay image?

On hold

This is a great article, sorry if the review seems rushed as I have to go in a minute. I'll leave this on hold until all of the above are clarified. JAGUAR  20:13, 18 December 2015 (UTC)

@Czar: pinging, I know the bot has your restraining order! JAGUAR  20:13, 18 December 2015 (UTC)

@Jaguar, done! Thanks! More like the bot has a restraining order against me—I wish I received notifs but who knows why I don't get them... Re: criticized/disputed—should be fine with the parallelism, no? (praised its X, criticized its Y, disputed its Z) Hitman Go is its predecessor in the Go franchise—not sure we can call it a franchise quite yet, but the dev sees it as such in interviews and whatnot. IGN is italicized in its capacity of providing creative/original reporting (not as IGN the business). czar 20:34, 18 December 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! I wasn't aware that Go was considered a franchise and I must have misread the 'disputed' parallel. Anyway, this is good to go JAGUAR  21:44, 19 December 2015 (UTC)