Talk:La Dama Enmascarada/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:51, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 09:51, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Caballero was a relative of professional wrestler Irma González as well as González's daughter Irma Aguilar although it is unclear exactly how they were related." - seems odd. In the infobox, it states that she is niece to Irma González. Please clarify this
• "She started out as a masked wrestler," - began her career
• "but lost her mask in 1958 to Irma González, but would later wrestle under the mask again." - repetition of the word "but"

Biography

• "Caballero was born into a circus family" - she
• Wikilink boxing promoters to Promoter (entertainment)

Professional wrestling career

• "including Magdalena Caballero. Caballero would work" Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this.
• "Her reign lasted less than a year as Irma González won the championship later that year." - in 1955.
• "she would at times wrestle under her real name and at other times still use the "La Dama Enmascarada" name," - and sometimes the
• "After the mask loss" - the loss of her mask,
• "despite not being masked anymore." - no longer being masked.
• "Due to very few records of wrestling from that period of time" - from that time period
• "it's uncertain who defeated La Dama" - it is uncertain as to who
• "On January 22, 1961, La Dama Enmascarada evened the score with Irma González" - the text in bold is not particularly encyclopedic
• "as she teamed up with Chabela Romero to take on the team of Irma González and Toña la Tapatía" - repetition of "team"
• "Empresa Mexicana de Lucha Libre (EMLL) show in Guadalajara." - the acroynms are not needed since they are not repeated elsewhere

Personal life

• "Caballero and husband Andrés Ramos had a total of six children together before their divorce in the 1950s" - the text in bold is not needed
• "Magdalena Caballero died on March 11, 2006," - what did she die from? Do we know?

References

• It looks like that Reference 1 is missing the page number that the story can be found on

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:59, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

• MWright96 thank you for your review, I will look over the comments and made the appropriate updates. Note, I am going to be quite busy over the weeekend so I may not get to the feedback for a day or two. MPJ-DK (talk) 16:10, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
  • MWright96 sorry it took me a bit, I had to e-mail someone who could actually see the archives of the newspaper since the article they sent me way back did not include the page number. I got it all that I believe I've addressed all issues. MPJ-DK (talk) 01:31, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
    • @MPJ-DK: Now promoting to GA class; I've made one small change to the prose. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 29 April 2020 (UTC)