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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 19:06, 15 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

King & Queen, released in 1967 by Stax Records, is a duets album by Otis Redding and Carla Thomas, two of the label's most successful artists. --> Odd wording. How about something like: King & Queen is a studio album by American recording artists Otis Redding and Carla Thomas. It was released on March 16, 1967 by Stax Records.

Done

The LP was Redding's sixth album, and Thomas's fourth, and the final studio album released by Redding before his death. --> The album is Redding's sixth album and Thomas's fourth, and the final studio album released by Redding before his death on December 10, 1967.

Done

Marvin Gaye --> link

Done

Following Redding's death in December 1967, the single "Lovey Dovey" was also released. --> Released as what?

What do you mean?

The original LP's --> album's

Not sure why this needs a change, but done

Don't see a reason the lead should have two paragraphs; they could all fit in one.

I also don't see a reason why it should be one paragraph. Two paragraphs are better for clarity.--GoP _T ^C _N 10:20, 16 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Background and recording

Who exactly is Jim Stewart?

Added he was the producer

Release

Six out of eleven songs were cut during their session; the rest were overdubbed by Redding in the following days owing to their concert obligations. --> Unsourced, and what does this have to do with the album's release?

Moved to recording section; it is actually sourced

Seems more appropriately entitled "release and promotion", as there's info about singles here.

How is this promotion?

Reception

King & Queen was given a positive critical reception by reviewers. --> King & Queen received generally positive acclaim from music critics.

Ok, done. But I am not sure about "positive acclaim"? Acclaim is always positive

Jason Ankeny from Allmusic --> Jason Ankeny of Allmusic

Done

Personnel

Source shouldn't be an external link.

This is better as placing the same ref all the time

I'm not understanding what you mean. Statυs (talk) 03:26, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

Unsourced.

Added

Billboard --> US Billboard

Disagree. It is known that Billboard is the US chart, and it charted only there

R&B chart --> Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs

The current is better because of consistency

Pop chart --> Billboard Hot 100

Ditto

Pop chart (in albums) --> US Billboard 200

Ditto.

R&B chart (in albums) --> US Billboard Top R&B/Hip-Hop Albums

Ditto

They are different charts, and should be done correctly. There is no such thing as the "Pop chart" and "Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs" and "Top R&B/Hip-Hop Albums" are to different things. Statυs (talk) 03:26, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Question: As this album was released in 1967, there was no "hip-hop" chart then nor was there a Billboard 200. If you're going to use the actual name of the charts, shouldn't it be the name of the charts as they were named then? --Starcheerspeaksnewslostwars^{Talk to me} 22:29, 13 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

References

2 uncatgorized redirects
Allmusic is not a magazine, and should not be in italics. Publisher is also missing; Rovi Corporation

I deitalicized Allmusic. The publisher is actually not missing

Ref 3 --> work is BBC Music, publisher is BBC

Ok, done.

I'm sorry, but since you have failed to fix the remaining issues that are on the article, I cannot pass this article. I have left you a few notifications on your talk page asking the issues to be fixed, and they haven't been. The last one I stated that I would have to fail the article if they weren't fixed. Statυs (talk) 21:52, 31 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]