Talk:Keith Hartwig/GA1

GA Review

Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:07, 21 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 19:15, 15 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:15, 15 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

I copyedited the article here.
I archived the reference links.
The lead says one season in the NFL, yet it says in the infobox that he was with the Packers in 1978. Maybe clarify.
he recorded no statistics is probably not necessary. Instead, maybe say something like "he recorded no tackles on special teams and no receptions on offense".
Ref spot checks: #4, 8, 11, 14, 20, 23, 25

Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:42, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Gonzo fan2007: I re-worded the lead to fix your first issue; as for the second, tackles weren't recorded in 1977, so I don't think it'd be appropriate to change to your wording as he could have gotten a tackle, it just wasn't recorded. Any suggestions? BeanieFan11 (talk) 01:06, 21 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- It is fine as is. Nice work, passing! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:06, 21 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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