Talk:Kaiser Max-class ironclad (1862)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 02:05, 1 November 2016 (UTC)

Will come back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:05, 1 November 2016 (UTC)

• Section 1; sentence 1; "...launch of the French Gloire, the first ironclad warship", first ironclad of the world or Europe or France, mention that clearly.
  • Done
• Section 1; Better mention who is "Kaiser Franz Josef I", something like "Emperor of Austria" etc.
  • Good idea
• Section 1.1; para 2; What is "ihp"?
  • Indicated horsepower - it's already linked in the first half of that sentence
• Section 1.2; Please maintain consistency while mentioned the pounder count; 48-pounder, 24-pounder, 12-pounder gun, six-pounder. Instead of "six", "6" is to be used.
  • Good catch
• Section 1.2; She also carried a single 12-pounder gun and a six-pounder; "a six-pounder" what?. Consider revising it to "She also carried a single 12-pounder and a six-pounder gun" or something the way. Leaving just six-pounder is a bit confusing.
  • See if how I reworded it works for you.
• Section 1.2; armor was 110 mm (4 in), in infobox it is 110 mm (4.3 in). Correct this.
  • Fixed
• Section 3; para 1; Consider linking "Prussia" and "Italy" to their articles.
  • Done
• Section 3; para 1; "They did not return to active service after the work was completed, however.", reconsider use of "however", I feel it a bit confusing.
  • It reflects the contradiction between what one would expect (namely, that the ships would return to service once the modernization was done) and what actually happened.
• In the infobox it was stated that they remained in commission up to 1873, but this was never mentioned in the prose. The same goes in the lead also.
  • The ships were in commission until they were stricken from the register in 1873, which is mentioned
• Lead; The class consisted of the lead ship, Kaiser Max, Prinz Eugen, and Juan de Austria; is comma (,) necessary after "lead ship"? I think "lead ship Kaiser Max" would be fine.
  • Reworded slightly
• Both images don't have dates in their description. Circa dates are available from the sources mentioned. For SMS Prinz Eugen.jpg, it may be c. prior to 1867. For SMS Kaiser Max illustration.tif, it may be c. 1860–1869.
  • Both done

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:50, 1 November 2016 (UTC)

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:16, 3 November 2016 (UTC)