Talk:K'Andre Miller/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:41, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
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Copy changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]- Change "whom" to "which"
- Done.
Early life
[edit]- Does (MLB) need to be included if it is not to be mentioned again in the page? The other acronym recitations make sense, as they are repeated later.
- It does not, good catch.
Playing career
[edit]- Remove comma after "team rules"
- Done and moved ref to the end of the sentence.
- Remove comma after "7 seconds of ice time per game"
- Done.
International play
[edit]- "Miller has represented" — likely should be past tense
- Done.
Personal life
[edit]- Remove comma after "throughout his hockey career"
- Done.
Awards and honours
[edit]- It would be more appropriate in this case to use American English for the header.
- Whoops, you're right!
Other items
[edit]- Earwig catches organization names and recitations of stats, e.g.
three goals and 14 assists for 17 points
. Not a major issue. - The lone image on the page is freely licensed, though it is missing a
|alt=
tag.- Only part of the FA criteria, but added anyway. I am admittedly not great at alt text.
- References are archived.
- No BLP violations.
Summary
[edit]@GhostRiver: Just needs a few copy changes, the type that fresh eyes after nearly two months can catch. Putting on hold; ping when revised. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:54, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
- Sammi Brie Changes addressed, thank you! — GhostRiver 03:14, 30 January 2022 (UTC)